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Green Light
by Dave Undis and Jackie Hibbard
VERSE
We had a really great time on our first date.
But we were running late driving back to her place.
Stuck at a red light, time tick-tocking away.
If we weren’t back by twelve, her old man said there’d be hell to pay.
CHORUS
Lucky me, I got a green light.
I’m getting all the breaks tonight.
I’ll be smiling in the morning if things keep going right.
Lucky me, I got a green light.
VERSE
A yellow light lit her front porch as we pulled into her drive.
We hustled up to the screen door at 11:59.
Her phone rang. Her folks were at her uncle’s and decided to spend the night.
Another lucky break for me. I asked if I could come inside.
CHORUS
Lucky me, I got a green light.
I’m getting all the breaks tonight.
I’ll be smiling in the morning if things keep going right.
Lucky me, I got a green light.
BRIDGE
She took me inside, gave me a smile, and I just couldn’t resist.
I pulled her close and leaned in for a sweet little kiss.
CHORUS
Lucky me, I got a green light.
I’m getting all the breaks tonight.
I’ll be smiling in the morning if things keep going right.
Lucky me, I got a green light.
Lucky me, I got a green light.
Lucky me, I got a green light.
Yeah I got a green light.
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Very clever writing!
I’ve listened to it twice and I feel that there is not enough separation in the production - too much stuff is sitting too close to the centre and maybe some EQ’ing could help.
But, this is probably just a demo and it probably doesn’t matter much…
Nice job.
November 28, 2015
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Paul Tarvydas
Very clever writing!
I’ve listened to it twice and I feel that there is not enough separation in the production - too much stuff is sitting too close to the centre and maybe some EQ’ing could help.
But, this is probably just a demo and it probably doesn’t matter much…
Nice job.
November 28, 2015
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