My second R&B attempt. I really like the verses, but it needs a better bridge. Not sure what to do there. Rewrite with me?
Rewrite bridge with me?
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VERSE 1:
Roberta and Etta both sounded bad
The great Marvin Gaye just made me feel sad
The life that I knew was all outta tune
Before I met you
VERSE 2:
Valentines day wasn't my scene
The sunset and moonlight meant nothin' to me
A table for two just led to the blues
Before I met you
BRIDGE 1:
When I met you
I saw true love for the first time
Your smile shows me the way
I'd missed out on so much in life
But I don't mind
I make up for those lost days
With you every night
VERSE 3:
I never had kisses that tasted so sweet
A million excuses to stay under the sheets
I didn't spoon, or snuggle till noon
Before I met you
BRIDGE 2:
When I met you
I saw true love for the first time
Your smile showed me the way
I'd missed out on so much in life
But I don't mind
I make up for those lost days
With you every night
VERSE 4:
I never had kisses that made me feel weak
Someone who needs me, someone to need
Kept my heart cool, but I was a fool
Before I met you
OUTRO:
The life that I knew was all outta tune
Before I met you
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