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Love Happens

Sarah Spencer

July 13, 2015

Genre: Country

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We put SOO much pressure on ourselves to be lovable. To dress right, act right, like all the right things. But we just need to relax and be ourselves and let real, authentic, beautiful love happen to us.

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I've been playing this song out for a while now, but I would LOVE some feedback on the lyrics before I cut the vocals. We recorded the music a while back and I've just been kinda sitting on it since them. Thanks, y'all!


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David Flack

I really love this song.  The lyrics are great…..no need to change.  It’s got a catchy melody and nice changes in tempo.

July 14, 2015

Carlos Tabora

Hi Sarah.

I listened several times and really like the song. I think the verses and chorus are great. They flow well and and have a nice pace to them.

But the bridge seems a little too wordy, long-winded or maybe some of the phrasing needs to be tweaked. For example, “could be circumstance, could be perfectly planned, Coulda been there all along, simply waiting on. All the stars to align, get that set up just right” is a lot to say and you seem like you’re really working hard trying to fit everything in.

Maybe cut a couple of lines or trim down some of the words/scenarios.

For example…

“Step back a minute, watch it unfolding.
Might be someone new, might be an old friend
Could be better than what you’ve perfectly planned
Maybe they’ve been there all along, just waiting on….

Yoooouuuu….Just take a deep breath…
(Rest of Chorus)”

Feel free to use what you like (if anything). Hope this helps. Good luck with this!!!

Best…

July 15, 2015

Dick Plunk

Sarah,

Great song. I enjoyed everything about it. I agree that the bridge is a little long; however, I really like the lines /points made in it because they all ring true. Possibly the bridge could be reduced to a couple of lines and the rest could be turned into a third verse.

Even if you don’t change it, I’ll still love the song.

July 15, 2015

Dennis Field

Sarah,

I’m always excited when you drop a new song on Frettie. This is super catchy!

July 27, 2015

Sarah Spencer

Thank you all SO much for the wonderful feedback! I’ll take another look at the bridge before we go in the studio. You are the best!!

August 10, 2015

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Brent Baxter

Sarah!
Hey, I dig a lot of this.  Good imagery, relevant, (sadly) universal.  Uptempo positive depth/love.  Good work.

Only thing that really bothered me is the word “everyone” in the 1st line of the chorus.  Could be taken as preachy or that the singer is telling the listener how to live.

Maybe you can say something like “Oh, why can’t we, just take a deep breath… pressure on ourselves…” to make it a human condition thing that the singer also has to deal with.  Less “I’m above you” and more “I’m with you.”  Not that that’s necessarily the perfect solution, but you get the idea.

Overall… good work!

God bless,

Brent

January 02, 2017

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Sarah Spencer

Thanks so much, @Brent! I hear ya. A very simple line change like that would make a world of difference. Appreciate you listening and commenting!

January 02, 2017

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David Flack

I really love this song.  The lyrics are great…..no need to change.  It’s got a catchy melody and nice changes in tempo.

July 14, 2015

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Carlos Tabora

Hi Sarah.

I listened several times and really like the song. I think the verses and chorus are great. They flow well and and have a nice pace to them.

But the bridge seems a little too wordy, long-winded or maybe some of the phrasing needs to be tweaked. For example, “could be circumstance, could be perfectly planned, Coulda been there all along, simply waiting on. All the stars to align, get that set up just right” is a lot to say and you seem like you’re really working hard trying to fit everything in.

Maybe cut a couple of lines or trim down some of the words/scenarios.

For example…

“Step back a minute, watch it unfolding.
Might be someone new, might be an old friend
Could be better than what you’ve perfectly planned
Maybe they’ve been there all along, just waiting on….

Yoooouuuu….Just take a deep breath…
(Rest of Chorus)”

Feel free to use what you like (if anything). Hope this helps. Good luck with this!!!

Best…

July 15, 2015

1

Dick Plunk

Sarah,

Great song. I enjoyed everything about it. I agree that the bridge is a little long; however, I really like the lines /points made in it because they all ring true. Possibly the bridge could be reduced to a couple of lines and the rest could be turned into a third verse.

Even if you don’t change it, I’ll still love the song.

July 15, 2015

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Dennis Field

Sarah,

I’m always excited when you drop a new song on Frettie. This is super catchy!

July 27, 2015

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Sarah Spencer

Thank you all SO much for the wonderful feedback! I’ll take another look at the bridge before we go in the studio. You are the best!!

August 10, 2015

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Brent Baxter

Sarah!
Hey, I dig a lot of this.  Good imagery, relevant, (sadly) universal.  Uptempo positive depth/love.  Good work.

Only thing that really bothered me is the word “everyone” in the 1st line of the chorus.  Could be taken as preachy or that the singer is telling the listener how to live.

Maybe you can say something like “Oh, why can’t we, just take a deep breath… pressure on ourselves…” to make it a human condition thing that the singer also has to deal with.  Less “I’m above you” and more “I’m with you.”  Not that that’s necessarily the perfect solution, but you get the idea.

Overall… good work!

God bless,

Brent

January 02, 2017

0

Sarah Spencer

Thanks so much, @Brent! I hear ya. A very simple line change like that would make a world of difference. Appreciate you listening and commenting!

January 02, 2017


“Love Happens”
© 2014 Sarah Spencer / Big Oak Songs (ASCAP)
www.SarahSpencer.com
SarahSpencerMusic@gmail.com


All her makeup on the counter,
And all her dresses on the bed,
Gotta find the perfect color,
Gotta wear the perfect fit,

It makes a difference,
It makes her happy,
Or so tells herself, she paints it on her heart,
So prim and proper,
Got it all wrapped in,
When she’s lonely but at least she looks the part,

Oooh everyone just take a deep breath
You’re putting way too much pressure on yourself again
Just close your eyes, stop looking
And when you least expect it.
Love happens

Oh another profile picture,
Another flirt, another wink,
People love somebody popular.
That’s what he really thinks.

That it makes a difference,
It makes him happy,
It makes him feel just like he’s really liked.
He’s got it together,
Now if only,
Someone would take a chance with him offline.

Oooh everyone just take a deep breath
You’re putting way too much pressure on yourself again
Just close your eyes, stop looking
And when you least expect it.
Love happens

Step back a minute, watch it happening.
Might be someone new, might be random,
Could be circumstance, could be perfectly planned,
Coulda been there all along, simply waiting out on,
All the stars to align, get that set up just right,
Building it up to the rest of your life.

Oooh everyone just take a deep breath
You’re putting way too much pressure on yourself again
Just close your eyes, stop looking
And when you least expect it.

Oooh everyone just take a deep breath
You’re putting way too much pressure on yourself again
Just close your eyes, stop looking
And when you least expect it.
Love happens

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