Wrote this song in 2003 for my granddaughter, Kylie, who was born, she was never suppose to walk, talk or feed herself, "IF" she survived, well she survived and she does all the things the doctors said she wouldn't, but it hasn't been an easy road
Hi Audrey, heartfelt song about your precious granddaughter.
Well done:) I really like the lift in your chorus “Earth Bound Angel”, but I have to agree with Dennis, I think that last line in chorus “And God will” is inconsistent with the nice flow you had going in the chorus. I think that was a minor? I think re-working that line would make it sound better.
All the best to you and your granddaughter.
March 20, 2015
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Just curious—why didn’t you include the lyrics, so listener can follow along as he/she listens to your song?
August 08, 2018
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Thanks for sharing Audrey. I like the strength in the chorus. At least for me, I feel that minor chord (believe it’s a minor) through me off some. I’d be curious to hear what others think. Maybe reach out to Mary Segato (Fellow Frettie member) and request her feedback too. She’s got a similar sound. May provide another perspective.
March 19, 2015
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Hi Audrey, heartfelt song about your precious granddaughter.
Well done:) I really like the lift in your chorus “Earth Bound Angel”, but I have to agree with Dennis, I think that last line in chorus “And God will” is inconsistent with the nice flow you had going in the chorus. I think that was a minor? I think re-working that line would make it sound better.
All the best to you and your granddaughter.
March 20, 2015
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Just curious—why didn’t you include the lyrics, so listener can follow along as he/she listens to your song?
August 08, 2018
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Dennis Field
Thanks for sharing Audrey. I like the strength in the chorus. At least for me, I feel that minor chord (believe it’s a minor) through me off some. I’d be curious to hear what others think. Maybe reach out to Mary Segato (Fellow Frettie member) and request her feedback too. She’s got a similar sound. May provide another perspective.
March 19, 2015
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