This is a little heavier than what I usually write, but lately I've been feeling the nervous about the current state of the world: conflict in the Middle East, extremism on the rise, politics is more divisive than ever and the American ideal seems to be vanishing.
Thanks Jeremy. Glad you like the song. I agree my voice isn’t quite right for this song. My band, The Jeffs, plays it live, and it seems to go over pretty well, but I agree, the vocal could use more edge than what I can pull off. Maybe someone will cover it someday.
October 15, 2015
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Hi,
I like this tune’s uptempo, hard-charging sound. The production is nice and crisp and clear, everything sounds pretty good.
My one note concerns the vocal. It’s basically fine, but I suspect you can do even better. For such a hard-charging song, the vocal sounds a bit restrained and almost too even keeled. After all, this is a song about disorientation, anxiety, and a wish to escape. I think the lead vocal needs to reflect that a bit more. You have a nice, clear voice, but try to rough it up a little to give the tune an even greater sense of urgency and tension.
October 15, 2015
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Thanks Jeremy. Glad you like the song. I agree my voice isn’t quite right for this song. My band, The Jeffs, plays it live, and it seems to go over pretty well, but I agree, the vocal could use more edge than what I can pull off. Maybe someone will cover it someday.
October 15, 2015
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Jeremy Shere
Hi,
I like this tune’s uptempo, hard-charging sound. The production is nice and crisp and clear, everything sounds pretty good.
My one note concerns the vocal. It’s basically fine, but I suspect you can do even better. For such a hard-charging song, the vocal sounds a bit restrained and almost too even keeled. After all, this is a song about disorientation, anxiety, and a wish to escape. I think the lead vocal needs to reflect that a bit more. You have a nice, clear voice, but try to rough it up a little to give the tune an even greater sense of urgency and tension.
October 15, 2015