I wrote this a while ago, and just now found a completely different set of lyrics that I had forgotten about... I had the opening riff and thought it sounded kind of like an old-fashioned train song.
Thanks Dan, that’s really good feedback. I had the music first, which seemed to “speak” that first line of verse to me, so I had deliberately paired them. I never considered unpairing the vocals from the music, but I will definitely give that a try!
June 05, 2014
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I’d agree with Dan on this one too. The vocals distracted me some. Maybe increasing the tempo could also be nice and would also play up that train vibe. I do like the guitar for sure.
June 05, 2014
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Yes…the vocals are distracting. Separate them musically from the melody and it would pull me in. Makes one want to travel…hit the road!!!
June 09, 2014
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A good folkie song. I don’t mind the vocals following the gat ,it is a recognised style, but the top C does come out as very dominant
June 22, 2014
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Don’t give up on me baby, I’ve been winding my way home
I’ve been trying to find my way back home to you
Don’t give up on me baby, I’ve been winding my way home
I’ve been trying to find my way back home to you
And in my mind I see you shining
(when I) finally lay my lonely eyes on you
Don’t give up on me baby, I’ve been winding my way home
I’ve been trying to find my way back home to you
The road’s been tough on me baby, I’ve been riding all alone
As the miles go by my heart still stays with you
The nights are rough on me baby, I’ve been fighting on my own
I’ve been trying to keep my mind on days with you
And in my mind I see you shining
(when I) finally lay my lonely eyes on you
Don’t give up on me baby, I’ve been winding my way home
I’ve been trying to find my way back home to you
Don’t give up on me baby, I’ve been winding my way home
I’ve been trying to find my way back home to you
I’ve been trying to find my way back home to you
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Cool traveling song! The only thing I think that didn’t work for me was the way your vocals paralleled the guitar.. It’s a great melody and guitar line, but hearing them both together was a little distracting. I will normally try to counterpoint the guitar parts and vocal parts so they compliment each other rather than sound like the same thing.
It’d be a good in-between-verses kind of instrumental feature to compliment what the listener just heard.
I like your chops a lot, and you’re right, it does sound like a great train song. I could hear this as background music during a train montage.
Thanks!
June 05, 2014
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Thanks Dan, that’s really good feedback. I had the music first, which seemed to “speak” that first line of verse to me, so I had deliberately paired them. I never considered unpairing the vocals from the music, but I will definitely give that a try!
June 05, 2014
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I’d agree with Dan on this one too. The vocals distracted me some. Maybe increasing the tempo could also be nice and would also play up that train vibe. I do like the guitar for sure.
June 05, 2014
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Yes…the vocals are distracting. Separate them musically from the melody and it would pull me in. Makes one want to travel…hit the road!!!
June 09, 2014
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A good folkie song. I don’t mind the vocals following the gat ,it is a recognised style, but the top C does come out as very dominant
June 22, 2014
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Dan Heidt
Cool traveling song! The only thing I think that didn’t work for me was the way your vocals paralleled the guitar.. It’s a great melody and guitar line, but hearing them both together was a little distracting. I will normally try to counterpoint the guitar parts and vocal parts so they compliment each other rather than sound like the same thing.
It’d be a good in-between-verses kind of instrumental feature to compliment what the listener just heard.
I like your chops a lot, and you’re right, it does sound like a great train song. I could hear this as background music during a train montage.
Thanks!
June 05, 2014