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Somewhere To Go

Bim Walker

June 02, 2014

Genre: Folk

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This song was written as an exercise from the idea of a person who has died and is in his casket before the viewing starts, wondering if he was a good-enough friend that people will want to pay their respects. I used alliteration a lot in the verses.


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Dennis Field

Very interesting perspective to play off of. I often think about what “legacy” I will leave behind when I go and who will turn up at my funeral.

I think the concept is unique, but you could probably use some tightening up on the song as hole. I simply started to fall out of the song.

Keep playing with this one though. I liked the imagery you placed at the beginning of the song to pull me into it, but would like more of that throughout.

I’m not sure if this helps at all, but can you play into the events that happen at this mans funeral. The process of an empty room, the last ride and the burial? Just a thought.

June 04, 2014

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Bim Walker

Yeah, I agree with your assessment.  I like the idea of this enough to want to work with it.  I think part of the problem is that it’s not very interesting melodically, so I might try to change how the vocal lines work in the verses.  Having the bridge was one attempt to break it up a little.  I will also think about playing with the imagery a bit more, as you suggested.

Thanks again,

Bim

June 05, 2014

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Dennis Field

I think you’re exactly right. The melody is not pulling me in enough. I look forward to hearing a revised version of this for sure.

June 05, 2014

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Somewhere To Go

Written by Bim Walker

The room is ready, clean and empty
echoes and chairs my only company
and that old familiar helpless feeling:
Will they still fill a room for me?

Fluorescent flicker softly shading
the neutral hues of blue and green
The empty log that mocks me, waiting
is all my eyes can find to see


Refrain:
And I know I’ve got somewhere to go
but please don’t let me leave alone


The last few days are slowly fading
but I know people close to me
were by my side as I lay waiting
to find some truth I could believe

A coldness pulls my mind asunder
with doubt and fear and all the finality
When it was I who brought them comfort,
was I who they needed me to be?


(Refrain)


Bridge:
Hide my sins and shield my sorrows
from all my friends and family
Lend your love to all tomorrows
and grant them peace eternally


And now the room is slowly filling
It seems that some remember me
and ‘cause I can’t thank those attending,
let this be my apology


(Refrain)

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Dennis Field

Very interesting perspective to play off of. I often think about what “legacy” I will leave behind when I go and who will turn up at my funeral.

I think the concept is unique, but you could probably use some tightening up on the song as hole. I simply started to fall out of the song.

Keep playing with this one though. I liked the imagery you placed at the beginning of the song to pull me into it, but would like more of that throughout.

I’m not sure if this helps at all, but can you play into the events that happen at this mans funeral. The process of an empty room, the last ride and the burial? Just a thought.

June 04, 2014

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Bim Walker

Yeah, I agree with your assessment.  I like the idea of this enough to want to work with it.  I think part of the problem is that it’s not very interesting melodically, so I might try to change how the vocal lines work in the verses.  Having the bridge was one attempt to break it up a little.  I will also think about playing with the imagery a bit more, as you suggested.

Thanks again,

Bim

June 05, 2014

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Dennis Field

I think you’re exactly right. The melody is not pulling me in enough. I look forward to hearing a revised version of this for sure.

June 05, 2014


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