This song is about the repetitiveness and the sometimes droning bits of everyday life. "Artificial Light" tries to create he visual of a person (could be male or female) waking up to a life that isn't quite as real or engaging as they had hoped.
The verse describes the love interest and how they regardless of the strength of the relationship, help keep us going through life, either as a farfetched crush or as someone to hold close. Still working on this part of the song. Percussion was done on a mic'd table and represents the heavy marching of working people weighing their heads down everyday.
I was immediately drawn into this! Nice stuff. The intro followed by that long pause was really cool. Lots of things going on, but I think you did a great job with managing all of it. Good stuff for sure!
June 05, 2014
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There is a lot going on here. It keeps the listener listening to try and discern the differences. I found the song quite intriguing/haunting. Enjoyed it.
June 09, 2014
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Interesting sound. I like the collage style and the dark, droning tone. Unless you purposely want the lyrics to sounds murky and mysterious, you might try bumping the vocals up a bit in the mix. As recorded, the vocals are pretty muddy, buried way down in the mix.
October 15, 2015
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Waking up to artificial light
I only hope I can stay awake untll night
Waking up to live the day to day
Artificial smiles to come my way
I was droned apart
You must act your age
In a crowded place
I wanted everything
I wanted your smile
Everything was in my way
Every little page and everything I know is all
You given me everything that I know I want
Waking up to artificial light
I only hope I can stay awake untll night
Waking up to live the day to day
Artificial smiles to come my way
Piano Instrumental
Concluding Instrumental - A vocal/looped/crazy way of representing the repetitiveness of everyday life. I want the overlapping phrases to be the small talk that you hear at bars, kind of chugging along as it slowly dissolves into the piano melody.
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This song is pretty rad. The Line (at least I think it flows this way) “You must act your age in a crowded place” connected the tone of the song and the ‘jumbled’ nature of the musical/textual line. I got the image of a crowd of people all trying to talk at once. I really like this one. I also like the instrumental at the end. Seems to fit. Had I not been reading the lyrics while listening, I might have missed a few lyrics, but that might have been ok.. I might have caught them more the next time, which adds to the unique quality of this song. Good work!
June 05, 2014
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I was immediately drawn into this! Nice stuff. The intro followed by that long pause was really cool. Lots of things going on, but I think you did a great job with managing all of it. Good stuff for sure!
June 05, 2014
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There is a lot going on here. It keeps the listener listening to try and discern the differences. I found the song quite intriguing/haunting. Enjoyed it.
June 09, 2014
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Interesting sound. I like the collage style and the dark, droning tone. Unless you purposely want the lyrics to sounds murky and mysterious, you might try bumping the vocals up a bit in the mix. As recorded, the vocals are pretty muddy, buried way down in the mix.
October 15, 2015
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Dan Heidt
This song is pretty rad. The Line (at least I think it flows this way) “You must act your age in a crowded place” connected the tone of the song and the ‘jumbled’ nature of the musical/textual line. I got the image of a crowd of people all trying to talk at once. I really like this one. I also like the instrumental at the end. Seems to fit. Had I not been reading the lyrics while listening, I might have missed a few lyrics, but that might have been ok.. I might have caught them more the next time, which adds to the unique quality of this song. Good work!
June 05, 2014