Spent a few hours yesterday recording this in the studio. Don't know how to play the drums, so I just hit a hi hat with my hand a lot. I think it came out ok, despite using the same condenser mic on everything. Give me your thoughts!
Production thoughts? Still some lyric tweaks out there?
Very singer/songwriter feel to this one… That’s style, not content. Lyrically, it’s remarkably visual, considering the subject matter. You’ve done a really good job with this one Joey. And, on an iPhone?
May 23, 2014
Joey, everything you write is incredible! This is more pop-rock than the other songs of yours I’ve heard, but it’s truly great. I wish I could give more constructive comments on your music, but it’s so obvious that you take pains to make sure all of the lyrics are so well-placed and that the music falls and rises in all the right spots… I don’t have anything to suggest!
I didn’t time it, so I’m not sure how long it is, but I will say that it seemed to end a little abruptly. I kind of wanted one more verse or a bridge or something, to get a little bit more of the story. Gary’s right that you painted a great picture, though, lyrically (as you always do.) I especially loved the “watch the static on tv” line.
July 18, 2014
Wow mate - great sound! Your production, playing, sounds, hooks, voice, lyrics, melody - I think they’re all really cool.
October 19, 2015
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Last night, you said hello to me.
I tried, but I couldn't speak.
The way you moved, around my room, now you're a mystery.
Last night, you smile and looked at me.
They say I've been seeing things.
Since you've been gone, and I could be wrong…
But I swear I saw your face.
I think I heard your voice.
Were you next to me, or in my dreams?
Or am I, am I seeing things?
I swear I saw your dress.
And I think I'm still your boy
In another life?
Or am I, am I seeing things?
Last night, I came home to a lie.
Looked in the mirror, wondered why
I say, "I've moved on" but you all know
That I'm still trying
Last night, I came home in defeat.
Sat and watched the static on tv.
They say you're gone, and I could be wrong…
But I swear I saw your face.
I think I heard your voice.
Were you next to me, or in my dreams?
Or am I, am I seeing things?
But I swear I saw your face.
I think I heard your voice.
Were you next to me, or in my dreams?
Or am I, am I seeing things?
I swear I saw your face.
I think I'm still your boy
In another life
Or am I, am I seeing things?
Am I seeing things?
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Very singer/songwriter feel to this one… That’s style, not content. Lyrically, it’s remarkably visual, considering the subject matter. You’ve done a really good job with this one Joey. And, on an iPhone?
May 23, 2014
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Joey, everything you write is incredible! This is more pop-rock than the other songs of yours I’ve heard, but it’s truly great. I wish I could give more constructive comments on your music, but it’s so obvious that you take pains to make sure all of the lyrics are so well-placed and that the music falls and rises in all the right spots… I don’t have anything to suggest!
I didn’t time it, so I’m not sure how long it is, but I will say that it seemed to end a little abruptly. I kind of wanted one more verse or a bridge or something, to get a little bit more of the story. Gary’s right that you painted a great picture, though, lyrically (as you always do.) I especially loved the “watch the static on tv” line.
July 18, 2014
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Wow mate - great sound! Your production, playing, sounds, hooks, voice, lyrics, melody - I think they’re all really cool.
October 19, 2015
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Julie Field
Nice song Joey!
May 06, 2014