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My Alzheimer's Love Song. Written out of personal experience with the dreaded disease. I saw an older couple walking along the beach and thought of a love that could survive loss of memory. Love in this moment, because all others are forgotten.
Tell me what you like. Please know that the song continues to evolve and sounds better today than it did when this was recorded. It will be better next week than it is today if you come hear me play. ...But I am open to your input too.
Thanks for listening and offering your input Dennis. I’ll definitely take your comments into consideration as I continue to develop this song.
January 21, 2014
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Randy,
Like Dennis said, you have some really nice lines in this song and the subject is one that far too many people will have sympathy with. I am not crazy about the “Yea, Yes, ........etc” and would rather have a short intro of strings leading into a very emotional song.
February 03, 2014
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With Her by Randy Lee © 10.6.2013
Yea, Yes, Yea yea….Umm, Hmmm, Yeah yeah…
She walks with him, along the sand
He keeps her near, hand in hand
The years haven’t all gone as planned
But they’re gone now.
She mostly smiles when she hears his voice,
He has no doubt he made the right choice
And he can’t even remember now
How or when, he first fell in love with her
But memories are overrated
He knows if he had waited
For all the stars to align
He would have been alone all this time
Or worse – He wouldn’t have this time
With her
(chorus)
With her the sky is bluer
Winds are not as strong
Bad times fewer
And don’t last near as long.
With her by his side
Everything always seemed possible
And now with his memory fading
He doesn’t care if he ever recalls
Any days but these …with her
(bridge)
Yea, Yes, Yea yea….Umm, Hmmm,, Yeah yeah…
(chorus)
With her the sky is bluer
Winds are not as strong
Bad times fewer
And don’t last near as long.
With her by his side
Everything always seemed possible
And now with his memory fading
He doesn’t care if he ever recalls
Any days but these ….
Any days but these …with her
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Randy,
Welcome to Frettie! Great story to write about. My only immediate feedback would just be flow and timing. I think you have some nice lines in here, but for me it is just a matter of building the story in a way that slowly draws me into it. So maybe slowing some parts of the song down, while you speed other parts up could be a nice emotional feeling that I get from it.
I’d also be curious how this could sound with some spoken verses maybe at the beginning.
It sounds like you have been working on this song and may have made some tweaks, so forgive me if this feedback is no longer appropriate to the current version that you have.
Thanks for sharing.
January 21, 2014
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Thanks for listening and offering your input Dennis. I’ll definitely take your comments into consideration as I continue to develop this song.
January 21, 2014
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Randy,
Like Dennis said, you have some really nice lines in this song and the subject is one that far too many people will have sympathy with. I am not crazy about the “Yea, Yes, ........etc” and would rather have a short intro of strings leading into a very emotional song.
February 03, 2014
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Dennis Field
Randy,
Welcome to Frettie! Great story to write about. My only immediate feedback would just be flow and timing. I think you have some nice lines in here, but for me it is just a matter of building the story in a way that slowly draws me into it. So maybe slowing some parts of the song down, while you speed other parts up could be a nice emotional feeling that I get from it.
I’d also be curious how this could sound with some spoken verses maybe at the beginning.
It sounds like you have been working on this song and may have made some tweaks, so forgive me if this feedback is no longer appropriate to the current version that you have.
Thanks for sharing.
January 21, 2014
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