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Life I love

Dennis Field

December 06, 2013

Genre: Country

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I was at a really small rodeo one day in PA. While having a few beers and chatting with some people, I realized that everyone performing in this Rodeo had sacrificed something to get here to perform for us. This could be one of those stories.

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I am open to all feedback. As is the norm, I recorded this on my iPhone. This is about 8 years old, but I always liked the visuals it brought. Second verse is probably not the best, but let me know what you guys think.


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Dick Plunk

Dennis - good self critique. I think you have a really good chorus. It paints a bunch of vivid images. My only problem with the song is that I think you have two different songs here. Your verses are about 2 people being torn apart by something (sad/tragic). Your chorus is about the rodeo life and how much the singer loves it (happy). A chorus should summarize/support the verses. You could split this and write 2 good songs.

Possibly the rodeo song could have verses in which the singer details the hardships of living the rodeo life - but - then it flows into the chorus with the theme being “this is the life I love”.

Whatever you do keep those images!

December 06, 2013

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Dennis Field

Dick, thanks for the feedback! Glad you liked the chorus and I appreciate the kind words regarding the visuals. I also appreciate the feedback on how I could consider splitting this song up. Really great point on changing the verses to be more focused on the sacrifices of a cowboy on a rodeo circuit.

December 06, 2013

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Nathan Wall

I love this song , I love cowboy songs, being from the U.K cowboys and rodeos are things we don’t have more is the pity , I never have been to a rodeo but after listening to your lyrics the image was painted perfectly in my mind . I get it , love is like a rodeo ride , it could hurt but its worth it .

June 26, 2014

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Dennis Field

Nathan,

Thank you for the feedback! Glad I was able to paint a great picture for you. That was my biggest goal. Glad you got the concept too!

June 26, 2014

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Jamie Wilkinson

It sounds like you use the words ” it’s the life I love” at the end of the first verse and then again at the end of the chorus.  To use the word life at the end of the first verse seems fine but It’s just an idea I keep feeling like I wanna hear the end of the chorus say ” but it’s the life I chose. I think with the word chose instead of love for the end of the chorus could feel more moving and bring a full completion to the story. I don’t know how to say how that word chose makes me feel in the song it’s just the word I wanted to hear and the emotion I wanted to feel when I first heard it. Very great song though. Thank you for sharing!

December 05, 2015

Jamie Wilkinson

I just read Dick’s comment at the top and I think if you change the word love to chose it fixes that issue he was talking about also it really flows well with the word buckels. I think that’s the word ending the previous sentence.

December 05, 2015


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Dick Plunk

Dennis - good self critique. I think you have a really good chorus. It paints a bunch of vivid images. My only problem with the song is that I think you have two different songs here. Your verses are about 2 people being torn apart by something (sad/tragic). Your chorus is about the rodeo life and how much the singer loves it (happy). A chorus should summarize/support the verses. You could split this and write 2 good songs.

Possibly the rodeo song could have verses in which the singer details the hardships of living the rodeo life - but - then it flows into the chorus with the theme being “this is the life I love”.

Whatever you do keep those images!

December 06, 2013

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Dennis Field

Dick, thanks for the feedback! Glad you liked the chorus and I appreciate the kind words regarding the visuals. I also appreciate the feedback on how I could consider splitting this song up. Really great point on changing the verses to be more focused on the sacrifices of a cowboy on a rodeo circuit.

December 06, 2013

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Nathan Wall

I love this song , I love cowboy songs, being from the U.K cowboys and rodeos are things we don’t have more is the pity , I never have been to a rodeo but after listening to your lyrics the image was painted perfectly in my mind . I get it , love is like a rodeo ride , it could hurt but its worth it .

June 26, 2014

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Dennis Field

Nathan,

Thank you for the feedback! Glad I was able to paint a great picture for you. That was my biggest goal. Glad you got the concept too!

June 26, 2014

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Jamie Wilkinson

It sounds like you use the words ” it’s the life I love” at the end of the first verse and then again at the end of the chorus.  To use the word life at the end of the first verse seems fine but It’s just an idea I keep feeling like I wanna hear the end of the chorus say ” but it’s the life I chose. I think with the word chose instead of love for the end of the chorus could feel more moving and bring a full completion to the story. I don’t know how to say how that word chose makes me feel in the song it’s just the word I wanted to hear and the emotion I wanted to feel when I first heard it. Very great song though. Thank you for sharing!

December 05, 2015

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Jamie Wilkinson

I just read Dick’s comment at the top and I think if you change the word love to chose it fixes that issue he was talking about also it really flows well with the word buckels. I think that’s the word ending the previous sentence.

December 05, 2015


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