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Long Days

Dan Hartig

March 11, 2019

Genre: Pop

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This is a song about perseverance and pushing through your hardest challenges to get yourself to a better place.

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Lee Myers

Hi Dan,

Positive song of encouragement.  In the first verse, you’ve established the singer/singee connection well—-one friend advising another going through tough times.  We now know who singer is and why the singer is singing.

The first verse feels as if the worst is over for the singee. This is in contrast to the rest of the song which feels as if the singee is still in the midst of this troubling situation.

Maybe rewriting the first verse to reflect that the singer right now is recognizing that the singee is right now “on the edge of really breaking down” will help keep the tension that is present in the rest of the song. This will keep the listener pulling for the singee to prevail.

Great start.  Keep writing.

March 14, 2019

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Lee Myers

Hi Dan,

Positive song of encouragement.  In the first verse, you’ve established the singer/singee connection well—-one friend advising another going through tough times.  We now know who singer is and why the singer is singing.

The first verse feels as if the worst is over for the singee. This is in contrast to the rest of the song which feels as if the singee is still in the midst of this troubling situation.

Maybe rewriting the first verse to reflect that the singer right now is recognizing that the singee is right now “on the edge of really breaking down” will help keep the tension that is present in the rest of the song. This will keep the listener pulling for the singee to prevail.

Great start.  Keep writing.

March 14, 2019


Let the story begin
‘Bout this crazy year it’s been
For you my friend
You’re almost at the end
Of this terrible stage
That brought all this rage
You were really on the verge
Of really breaking down

You have to give it more time
It gets a little easier if you just
Try your best to persevere
And know your time is almost here

You’ve worked long days
And hard sleepless nights
You’ll through this phase
And reach greater heights
Just hold on
A little bit longer
And after you do
You’ll come out much stronger

But don’t you forget
When you’re filled with regret
This time will soon pass
You’ll be on your feet at last
When you can’t see the sun
And you just want to run
You should stop. Breathe. Repeat and repeat

Even in your darkest days you must search for the light
Even when you think you failed you must stand up, put up a fight

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