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Clean

David Kuncicky

March 02, 2019

Genre: Pop

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I am a novice songwriter and would like to receive any feedback on the music and lyrics of this song. I am not thin skinned so please be honest.


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Lee Myers

David,

Wanting to kick a drug addiction is a desire many face today. That makes your song relevant.  And, the singer’s positive emotional attitude is tempered by an awareness that getting “clean” is going to be difficult because there’s always the urge for “one more high.” That makes your song believable.

Making it clear who the singer is singing to and the relationship between them can make this song stronger.

Hope this helps.  Great job for tackling a tough subject.

Write on.

March 10, 2019

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Lee Myers

David,

Wanting to kick a drug addiction is a desire many face today. That makes your song relevant.  And, the singer’s positive emotional attitude is tempered by an awareness that getting “clean” is going to be difficult because there’s always the urge for “one more high.” That makes your song believable.

Making it clear who the singer is singing to and the relationship between them can make this song stronger.

Hope this helps.  Great job for tackling a tough subject.

Write on.

March 10, 2019


Clean
David Kuncicky

I'm gonna get clean
get it together
live for today
maybe things will get better

There must be more
so give me a sign
show me a window
don't leave me here blind

There is this need
so deep in my soul
that nothing can fill
it's out of control

I see what you mean
I hear what you say
so tell me again
I'll stay out of your way

Chorus:
Living on the street
sleeping in my car
I haven't seen my kids...
for a year or two
how did things go so far

I was flying stoned
what did I do
don't remember a thing
just give me a clue

Don't look so sad
You're breaking my heart
I'm gonna stay clean
I just had a rough start

Chorus:
Living on the street
sleeping in my car
I haven't seen my kids...
for a year or two
how did things go so far

I'm gonna get clean
reach for the sky
start a new life
after one more high

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