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She just wants someone with her to "go through it"...go through life together...the highs, the lows, and everything in-between. Co-written with Kevin Herchen. Produced by Pearl Snap Studios, Nashville. Vocal by Doug Moore.
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Thank you for your feedback, Frank. We are working on strengthening that chorus, so your feedback is right on point. Many thanks! Alexsi
March 01, 2019
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Hey there, Very cool song and you did a great job with it. I agree with Franks comment regarding the chorus. I was drawn in immediately in the 1st verse and when the chorus came, it was good but I was expecting maybe a bigger lift to set it apart from the verses and the last 2 lines felt a little loose and wasn’t sure the line needed to be repeated. The second verse was really cool like the 1st verse though the last 2 lines were a little repetitive in with rhyme with the word “place"and the description is a little confusing because line 3 says “When I go”, “I go with her” but then line 4 says “She puts me there” In my opinion a happy place and better place is like saying the same thing twice. Maybe consider revising the last two lines? Of course this is all just a personal opinion and preference, all that said I enjoyed the song and thought you did a great job!
March 05, 2019
Thank you, Stephen! I appreciate your feedback and will continue to work on this song. It helps when you hear the same kind of feedback a few times - it raises a flag (or two!) so you know what needs attention for the song to shine. Thanks and keep writing! Alexsi
March 06, 2019
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Not every day’s sunrise champagne on the California coast
I try ‘n make her feel that way, she’s the one I love the most
And she likes the fancy, but she’s not the fancy kind
What she really wants from me, is somethin’ money can’t buy
I’ve been tryin’ too hard to make her world turn right
Round and round I go, makin’ sure her everything’s alright
She’s beggin’ me please, come along for the ride
She don’t need saving , take my hand, hold on tight
Pressed against my lips, we’re a perfect fit
She just wants someone with her to go through it
She just wants someone with her to go through it
Not every night’s firelight kissin’, tangled up on the couch
And she’s helping me understand, what true love’s all about
When I go to my happy place, I go there with her
She puts me in a better place, without sayin’ a word
Repeat Chorus
She’s my one and my only, she makes my guitar sing
I’ll tell ya now, love’s a messed-up, beautiful thing
She’ll tell ya now, love’s a messed-up, beautiful thing
Repeat Chorus
And I wanna go through it…I’m ready to do it…I wanna go through it…with her
Co-written with Kevin Herchen. Produced by Pearl Snap Studios, Nashville. Vocal by Doug Moore.
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Hi Alexis, I love the feel and that cool groove of the verses, especially the opening lines are great. My expectation was that it leads to an even cooler chorus, but the chorus - mmh, I don’t know, it doesn’t knock my socks off, the melody line is a bit flat for my taste. I know this is a finished demo and you will not like to hear that, but I would work on a more catchy, more memorable chorus to make this song a great one.
February 28, 2019
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Thank you for your feedback, Frank. We are working on strengthening that chorus, so your feedback is right on point. Many thanks! Alexsi
March 01, 2019
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Hey there, Very cool song and you did a great job with it. I agree with Franks comment regarding the chorus. I was drawn in immediately in the 1st verse and when the chorus came, it was good but I was expecting maybe a bigger lift to set it apart from the verses and the last 2 lines felt a little loose and wasn’t sure the line needed to be repeated. The second verse was really cool like the 1st verse though the last 2 lines were a little repetitive in with rhyme with the word “place"and the description is a little confusing because line 3 says “When I go”, “I go with her” but then line 4 says “She puts me there” In my opinion a happy place and better place is like saying the same thing twice. Maybe consider revising the last two lines? Of course this is all just a personal opinion and preference, all that said I enjoyed the song and thought you did a great job!
March 05, 2019
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Thank you, Stephen! I appreciate your feedback and will continue to work on this song. It helps when you hear the same kind of feedback a few times - it raises a flag (or two!) so you know what needs attention for the song to shine. Thanks and keep writing! Alexsi
March 06, 2019
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Frank Renfordt
Hi Alexis, I love the feel and that cool groove of the verses, especially the opening lines are great. My expectation was that it leads to an even cooler chorus, but the chorus - mmh, I don’t know, it doesn’t knock my socks off, the melody line is a bit flat for my taste. I know this is a finished demo and you will not like to hear that, but I would work on a more catchy, more memorable chorus to make this song a great one.
February 28, 2019