Thinking about how much things have changed and how divided we are as a nation I am trying to figure out what's going on.
Thank you so much for the feedback Frank! I totally hear what you are saying and will go in and re-work something. I was attempting to say that we all have changed with how I went from myself to nation. Obviously I kinda failed with communicating that and your feedback is extremely helpful. Thank you so much!
February 28, 2019
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V1
Staring in the mirror
Looking at myself
Wondering when I become
Someone else
Green still covers trees
And blue fills the sea
I guess the only thing that changed
Was me
Ch.
I believe
There's a better way
I believe
There's time to save
I believe
There's a new song
It's growing strong
As the sun rises I believe
V2
Overwhelmed by TV
Trying to understand
All the hate and anger
In this land
With a heart to help out
We bale out the banks
As they evict us to show
Their thanks
Ch.
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Hey Kirk, I like your chorus, it’s catchy ear candy.
Regarding the lyric I was a bit confused, because you changed the focus within in the song from yourself to the nation. I think it may be better to stay with one theme only and the nation theme fits better to your hook. The song sounds a bit like a song from the eighties, which isn’t a bad thing, but it will be difficult to place the song in the current market. I would also recommend to shorten the song, there is nothing new happening at the end. Keep on working on this, a great chorus is more than half of the battle.
February 28, 2019
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Thank you so much for the feedback Frank! I totally hear what you are saying and will go in and re-work something. I was attempting to say that we all have changed with how I went from myself to nation. Obviously I kinda failed with communicating that and your feedback is extremely helpful. Thank you so much!
February 28, 2019
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Frank Renfordt
Hey Kirk, I like your chorus, it’s catchy ear candy.
Regarding the lyric I was a bit confused, because you changed the focus within in the song from yourself to the nation. I think it may be better to stay with one theme only and the nation theme fits better to your hook. The song sounds a bit like a song from the eighties, which isn’t a bad thing, but it will be difficult to place the song in the current market. I would also recommend to shorten the song, there is nothing new happening at the end. Keep on working on this, a great chorus is more than half of the battle.
February 28, 2019
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