Country-Pop
Not giving up. Wants to find back to what brought them together.
Thank you, Frank.
I will definitely consider writing more about his feelings and reflections. You might be right there.
When it comes to the first suggestion, shortening the upbeat leading into the chorus - I am not sure. I kind of like the rather long intro to the top note. It is as when the words start speeding up in the pre-chorus it feels natural to intensify it further towards the title hook. But one can become blind to one own’s ideas. I will definitely consider changing it. Try it out on people maybe.
February 26, 2019
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THE ROAD WHERE LOVE LIVES ON - Storrud/Denison
At a hundred miles an hour
We have lived our lives
I know the road ain't always been so smooth
Been kind of rocky of late
A steep uphill grade
We see that something must improve
You’ve been givin’ off vibes
And puttin’ up signs
To block my every move
Why can’t we turn this thing around
Before we're done
Let’s go down the road where love lives on
No u-turns, no detours
No signs that say the bridge is out
I gotta get through that I love you
Let’s go down the road where love lives on
It's been a lot of miles
We've been side by side
We didn’t start out on easy street
I'd say no matter what
We didn’t give it up
We always landed on our feet
Taken chances on curves
And stressing out nerves
No looking up ahead
Why can't we find the other route
Before it's gone
Chorus:
Let’s go down the road...
Bridge:
With every memory
Of family
Our neighbors and our friends
I really love you more now
Than I have ever done
Chorus:
Let's go down the road...
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Hi Roger, nice tune, I like the idea, chorus melody and some images. However I think your lyric could use some tweaks. Just a thought: I would consider to leave out the ‘Let’s go’ in the chorus, I think that would tighten it up somewhat
Down the road where love lives on
there are no u-turns, no detours
no signs that say the bridge is out
I gotta get through I still want you
down the road where love lives on
I also would consider to focus on the singer, what he feels and how he has acted in the past and what he is willing to do to save the relationship. I think the emotional impact is higher as if talking in the ‘we’ form - it isn’t a duet, isn’t it?
Feed that with some more imagery (e.g. .. haven’t brought you any flowers for a long time) Dare to be a little cheesy (but not too much), dig deeper into emotion - it’s Country Music.
Hope this gives you some new thoughts and ideas.
I’m not a professional songwriter and on the learning curve by myself, so feel free to ignore me.
February 08, 2019
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Thank you, Frank.
I will definitely consider writing more about his feelings and reflections. You might be right there.
When it comes to the first suggestion, shortening the upbeat leading into the chorus - I am not sure. I kind of like the rather long intro to the top note. It is as when the words start speeding up in the pre-chorus it feels natural to intensify it further towards the title hook. But one can become blind to one own’s ideas. I will definitely consider changing it. Try it out on people maybe.
February 26, 2019
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Frank Renfordt
Hi Roger, nice tune, I like the idea, chorus melody and some images. However I think your lyric could use some tweaks. Just a thought: I would consider to leave out the ‘Let’s go’ in the chorus, I think that would tighten it up somewhat
Down the road where love lives on
there are no u-turns, no detours
no signs that say the bridge is out
I gotta get through I still want you
down the road where love lives on
I also would consider to focus on the singer, what he feels and how he has acted in the past and what he is willing to do to save the relationship. I think the emotional impact is higher as if talking in the ‘we’ form - it isn’t a duet, isn’t it?
Feed that with some more imagery (e.g. .. haven’t brought you any flowers for a long time) Dare to be a little cheesy (but not too much), dig deeper into emotion - it’s Country Music.
Hope this gives you some new thoughts and ideas.
I’m not a professional songwriter and on the learning curve by myself, so feel free to ignore me.
February 08, 2019