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Hey Girl

Frank Renfordt

January 27, 2019

Genre: Country

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Hey, here is a finished demo of a song I've posted recently as a work tape.
It's kind of a hymn for the shy guys among us.
Hope you like it - any ideas to whom I could pitch it?

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Tony True

I won’t comment on who you might want to pitch this to as I don’t feel that this music style is my forte.

However I do like the song, I liked the rhyming scheme used in the verses.

It’s a well written tune, singable and memorable melody.  Lot’s of good going for this one.

February 01, 2019

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Frank Renfordt

Hi Toni, thank you for listening to the song. Glad you like it, even it is not your style of music that means a lot to me.

February 02, 2019

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Roger Storrud

I remember that I commented on the first version. I Iiked it a lot. Not sure what I said. But this sounds great.
Didi you make any changes?

February 04, 2019

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Frank Renfordt

Roger, thank you for listening. I‘ve tweaked a few lines, nothing spectacular. I‘ve also shortened the second verse, I think that is something you had recommended too.

February 05, 2019

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Tony True

I won’t comment on who you might want to pitch this to as I don’t feel that this music style is my forte.

However I do like the song, I liked the rhyming scheme used in the verses.

It’s a well written tune, singable and memorable melody.  Lot’s of good going for this one.

February 01, 2019

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Frank Renfordt

Hi Toni, thank you for listening to the song. Glad you like it, even it is not your style of music that means a lot to me.

February 02, 2019

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Roger Storrud

I remember that I commented on the first version. I Iiked it a lot. Not sure what I said. But this sounds great.
Didi you make any changes?

February 04, 2019

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Frank Renfordt

Roger, thank you for listening. I‘ve tweaked a few lines, nothing spectacular. I‘ve also shortened the second verse, I think that is something you had recommended too.

February 05, 2019


She caught my eye
She caught my heart
When I saw her waiting there for the bus
I was magnetized
And couldn‘t look away
While painting a picture of us
But I was a shy guy
And not a fly-boy 'n those days
Only in my head did I hear myself say

Hey girl
Won't you be my girl
I show you my world
If you show me yours I'll dare to dive in
Don‘t be shy girl
Come on be my girl
If you turn away we‘ll never know what could have been
Hey girl

My heart 's beating wild
When I see her again
Standing in line for a Broadway Show
And it feels like sky diving the first time
When I’m putting my whole heart on the line, saying

Hey girl
Won’t you be my girl
I show you my world
If you show me yours I'll dare to dive in
Don’t be shy girl
Come on be my girl
If you turn away we‘ll never know what could have been

And then she gives me that look and I can’t stop saying again

Hey girl
Won’t you be my girl
I show you my world
If you show me yours I'll dare to dive in
Don’t be shy girl
Come on be my girl
Let’s go to a place we never have been
Be my girl
Hey girl

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