Just a catchy hook line I had that Deema and I turned into something fun.
Brent Rader on vocals.
As always any feedback welcome...
Hi Tony, I like the easy feeling of the song. The lyric maybe a bit cliche and could use some fresh images and the chorus could stand out a bit more, the melody line is quite similar to the verse. Keep on!
January 15, 2019
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Tony True & Deema Homsi
Verse 1
All week we work and slave
To make our way in this rat race
That nine to five is killing me, time for us to be getgone
But now it’s only mid-weekly
Two more days till you and me
Are free to do what we love and be where we belong
Pre-Chorus 1
It’s five o’clock Friday top down, we don’t care where we’re bound
Pull that tarp way back, show the world our Cadillac
Chorus
Pump up the radio, we’re good to go
Nothin’ like the weekend, girlfriend
Freein’ your mind, body and soul
With your cruisin’ cowboy
Ridin’ with the top down, feelin’ so alive
Let our hearts be our guide
Rolling down this country road
With your cruisin’ cowboy
Verse 2
You snuggle up beside me
The two of us are all we need
No crackin’ maps, drivin’ through, area code still unknown
The dashboard hula girl’s wigglin’
Two more days the clock starts tickin’
What a thrill this weekend brings no matter where we go
Pre- Chorus 2
Our Caddy’s roarin’ loud, floatin’ on a dust cloud
Eldorado ‘76, she can pack quite a kick
Chorus
Pump up the radio, we’re good to go
Nothin’ like the weekend, girlfriend
Freein’ your mind, body and soul
With your cruisin’ cowboy
Ridin’ with the top down, feelin’ so alive
Let our hearts be our guide
Rolling down this country road
With your cruisin’ cowboy
©️2018, Tony True, Deema Homsi
Dec 5 & 12 2018
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Hey, Tony! Thanks for sharing your song with us. Right off the bat, I like that you put some tempo on this. The line “only mid-weekly” threw me. You mean it’s only mid-week, but it sounds, though, like you DO something mid-weekly. Like on a mid-weekly basis. It threw me.
I like that it’s positive, sung me-to-you (the girl) and has some tempo it. I like the title- don’t think I’ve heard it before.
Nice work here, Tony.
Hope that helps! Please take a moment to leave a comment on another writer’s song. It doesn’t have to be super-detailed or anything. Just a thought or two about the song. (Also, the best way to GET feedback is to GIVE feedback.) Thanks!
January 11, 2019
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Hi Tony, I like the easy feeling of the song. The lyric maybe a bit cliche and could use some fresh images and the chorus could stand out a bit more, the melody line is quite similar to the verse. Keep on!
January 15, 2019
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Hey, Tony! Thanks for sharing your song with us. Right off the bat, I like that you put some tempo on this. The line “only mid-weekly” threw me. You mean it’s only mid-week, but it sounds, though, like you DO something mid-weekly. Like on a mid-weekly basis. It threw me.
I like that it’s positive, sung me-to-you (the girl) and has some tempo it. I like the title- don’t think I’ve heard it before.
Nice work here, Tony.
Hope that helps! Please take a moment to leave a comment on another writer’s song. It doesn’t have to be super-detailed or anything. Just a thought or two about the song. (Also, the best way to GET feedback is to GIVE feedback.) Thanks!
January 11, 2019
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