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Heartfelt country-pop ballad.
Lyrics, melody, harmonies and all vocals are written and sung by me.
Instrumentals by William Barry.
Recorded in my home studio.
Hi Jill, I like your voice and for a home recording this is a nice production. The song has a nice ambience. A better separation between the parts could help to keep the listener in the song. I like your harmonies, but maybe you have overdone a little bit. Consider to focus on the Chorus with your harmonies to make it more stand out.
December 29, 2018
I like the song. The message is hopeful and inspiring. The melody is pretty, but I agree with Frank that the harmonies might have more impact if only used during the Chorus. I do like how you sing “Fall” with descending notes in the chorus. Very catchy. Good luck with it.
December 30, 2018
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Verse 1
We can't always choose
who our heart wants to love
and so many times
you've been down on your luck
are you in enough, to take the plunge
Chorus
Why don't you fall
down with me , so helplessly
Just fall, like there's no turning back
Just fall with me now, if gravity holds
We can stay together
Forever, in pieces as we fall.
Verse 2
You can't see
That I am broken
And all of my hopes
You have spoken
Is it just too late to jump in?
Chorus
Bridge
You were hurting, and hoping that I
Would erase, the tears of a thousand lies
And I see, the future in your eyes,
Even though I don't know if we'll survive.
Chorus
1
Hi Jill, I really like your song and love your melody and the way it falls melodically in the chorus. Your background vocals and piano track sound great, and I like your message and lyrics. Awesome work!
December 28, 2018
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Hi Jill, I like your voice and for a home recording this is a nice production. The song has a nice ambience. A better separation between the parts could help to keep the listener in the song. I like your harmonies, but maybe you have overdone a little bit. Consider to focus on the Chorus with your harmonies to make it more stand out.
December 29, 2018
1
I like the song. The message is hopeful and inspiring. The melody is pretty, but I agree with Frank that the harmonies might have more impact if only used during the Chorus. I do like how you sing “Fall” with descending notes in the chorus. Very catchy. Good luck with it.
December 30, 2018
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Reid Yamamoto
Hi Jill, I really like your song and love your melody and the way it falls melodically in the chorus. Your background vocals and piano track sound great, and I like your message and lyrics. Awesome work!
December 28, 2018