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Don’t Let Me Down, Belle

Roger Storrud

December 09, 2018

Genre: Country

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Country-Pop
A guy is finally telling his best friend about his girlfriend.


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Reid Yamamoto

Hi Roger, Nice song! I do feel it may help if you make it clearer who the song is about, and maybe eliminate the telling the best friend part…it’s confusing.

I had no idea the song was about a car, the Chevy, and then when you got to that part in the song, it made me confused, and had to think…“Oh, maybe the song is about a car.”

So maybe introduce in your first verses lines about your characters car:

“Your shimmering apple red paint glows so fine,
Your chrome trim hits me in my eyes every time….”

Etc. so we know it’s a song about your characters car.

I hope you take this as constructive feedback, because that is all it’s meant to be.

December 13, 2018

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Frank Renfordt

Hi Roger,
I like the idea of the song, but I have to agree with Reid, the lyric is really confusing and you have to make it more clear in the beginning that you talk to a car.

December 21, 2018

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Roger Storrud

Hi Reid and Frank,
Thank you for your feedback. I am aware of what you mean when you say that it becomes clear later in the song that he sings to his car.
But as you can see with the little changes in the chorus (adding bolts etc.) it is a conscious choice to do it this way. The purpose is to tell about the the love many men feel for their cars - and the frustration may women feel when they realize that they have to play second fiddle every now and then.
If the song becomes popular the confusion is only there the first time it is heard, and, my hope is, the juxtaposition will be the song’s strongest point.
That may be a hurdle, i agree, but it is a conscious and artistic choice. If it doesn’t work I’ll have to change it.

December 22, 2018

Alexsi Mallory

Hi Roger, I really like the lift of your chorus melody - it takes me someplace else - like an escape - which is what you want a song to do! Keep at it!

January 05, 2019


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Reid Yamamoto

Hi Roger, Nice song! I do feel it may help if you make it clearer who the song is about, and maybe eliminate the telling the best friend part…it’s confusing.

I had no idea the song was about a car, the Chevy, and then when you got to that part in the song, it made me confused, and had to think…“Oh, maybe the song is about a car.”

So maybe introduce in your first verses lines about your characters car:

“Your shimmering apple red paint glows so fine,
Your chrome trim hits me in my eyes every time….”

Etc. so we know it’s a song about your characters car.

I hope you take this as constructive feedback, because that is all it’s meant to be.

December 13, 2018

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Frank Renfordt

Hi Roger,
I like the idea of the song, but I have to agree with Reid, the lyric is really confusing and you have to make it more clear in the beginning that you talk to a car.

December 21, 2018

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Roger Storrud

Hi Reid and Frank,
Thank you for your feedback. I am aware of what you mean when you say that it becomes clear later in the song that he sings to his car.
But as you can see with the little changes in the chorus (adding bolts etc.) it is a conscious choice to do it this way. The purpose is to tell about the the love many men feel for their cars - and the frustration may women feel when they realize that they have to play second fiddle every now and then.
If the song becomes popular the confusion is only there the first time it is heard, and, my hope is, the juxtaposition will be the song’s strongest point.
That may be a hurdle, i agree, but it is a conscious and artistic choice. If it doesn’t work I’ll have to change it.

December 22, 2018

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Alexsi Mallory

Hi Roger, I really like the lift of your chorus melody - it takes me someplace else - like an escape - which is what you want a song to do! Keep at it!

January 05, 2019


Don’t Let Me Down,...

Written by Roger Storrud

Now It's time to tell you
'bout my girl who's just been calling
And ringing in my ear is still
her voice so softly whisp'ring:

I love you so - whish you were here
There's only one who can take me there

Don't let me down, Belle
My dear old companion
My faithful friend
My work of art
We're going home, Belle
So don't fall apart
Been gone for weeks
And nothing else
Can stop me now
Don't let me down

Back home lies my future and
The reason that my heart beats
But you have done your duty, girl
You've taken me to places

I wouldn't be going nowhere
There's only one who can take me there:

Don't let me down, Belle
My dear old companion
Your rattling belt
Your rusty bolts
We're going home, Belle
So don't fall apart
Been gone for weeks
And nothing else
Can stop me now
Don't let me down

Don't let her wait for me
I'm gonna kiss her, caress her, be true
I'm gonna tell her I love her
More than you, my old chevy
The only one who can take me there

We're going home, Belle
So don't fall apart
Been gone for weeks
And nothing else
Can stop me now
Don't let me down

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