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Shuffle and Deal

Roger Storrud

November 24, 2018

Genre: Country

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Country-Pop meets Calypso
An optimistic guy back on the prowl.


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Brent Baxter

Hi, Roger!  Thanks for sharing your song with us.  The chorus kicks in nicely and has a fun groove.  Horns?  I like it.  Cool title, too.  I like that it’s a positive spin.

However, the verses are little hard to follow.  So much metaphor and not as much clarity for me.  It’s really clever- maybe try being more clear and make me care about who this girl and guy are.  Connect more emotionally.

Hope that helps.  Please pay it forward by leaving a comment on another writer’s song.  Doesn’t have to be in-depth or authoritative- just your thoughts.  The best way to GET feedback is to GIVE feedback, after all!  Thanks!

November 28, 2018

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Roger Storrud

Thank you Brent.
I agree that the verses are a little problematic. I had hoped that the catchiness of the chorus would be enough to get it played enough times for people to get used to the lyrics. But that is probably not the right way around. grin

December 01, 2018

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Reid Yamamoto

Hi Roger, I love the idea of the song and your chorus is very cool!

I agree with Brent that it was a little unclear to me what was going on. I think you were talking about a girl the character had his eye on, but she is playing games.

Nice music, nice melody, and great the way you repeat the main hook in the chorus.

You have some very cool lines in it too in your lyrics. If you want to move me emotionally, I have to understand your story better.

Great job on it so far!

December 01, 2018

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Frank Renfordt

Hi Roger,

I like the catchy chorus - a nice sing along! Reminds me a bit to ‘Cotton Eye Joe’ and I would try out the same beat to make the song even more danceable.  As already said by Brent and Reid, the lyric is really clever - but maybe it’s a bit too clever for a commercial song, it’s really hard to connect emotionally with the song.
Keep on!

December 02, 2018

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Shuffle and Deal

Written by Roger Storrud

Shuffle and Deal


I've got my sharp eyes looking
I watch your every move now
You think you've got me dangling on the hook
You think you’re smarter
Cool and yet not knowing
That this man knows all the tricks in the book

You're a gambler at heart
But I can play it hard too

Oh lord - Shuffle and deal
Give a good hand on my lucky night
Oh lord - Shuffle and deal
Luckiest man alive
Oh lord - Shuffle and deal
Give a good hand when the love game starts
Oh lord - Shuffle and deal
Give me the ace of hearts

In the Love's casino
We're playing through the evening
You think you've got me
Caught up in your trap
My Royal blush you're
Cool and yet not seein' the crafty Joker hidden in the stack

You're a gambler at heart
But I know how to play too

Oh lord - Shuffle and deal
Give a good hand on my lucky night
Oh lord - Shuffle and deal
Luckiest man alive
Oh lord - Shuffle and deal
Give a good hand when the love game starts
Oh lord - Shuffle and deal
Give me the ace of hearts

When the chips are ready to be cashed in
I'm the mighty King of Spades
If the chips are down and the game's all done
I’ve got one more up my sleeve

Oh lord - Shuffle and deal
Give a good hand on my lucky night
Oh lord - Shuffle and deal
Luckiest man alive
Oh lord - Shuffle and deal
Give a good hand when the love game starts
Oh lord - Shuffle and deal
Give me the ace of hearts

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Brent Baxter

Hi, Roger!  Thanks for sharing your song with us.  The chorus kicks in nicely and has a fun groove.  Horns?  I like it.  Cool title, too.  I like that it’s a positive spin.

However, the verses are little hard to follow.  So much metaphor and not as much clarity for me.  It’s really clever- maybe try being more clear and make me care about who this girl and guy are.  Connect more emotionally.

Hope that helps.  Please pay it forward by leaving a comment on another writer’s song.  Doesn’t have to be in-depth or authoritative- just your thoughts.  The best way to GET feedback is to GIVE feedback, after all!  Thanks!

November 28, 2018

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Roger Storrud

Thank you Brent.
I agree that the verses are a little problematic. I had hoped that the catchiness of the chorus would be enough to get it played enough times for people to get used to the lyrics. But that is probably not the right way around. grin

December 01, 2018

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Reid Yamamoto

Hi Roger, I love the idea of the song and your chorus is very cool!

I agree with Brent that it was a little unclear to me what was going on. I think you were talking about a girl the character had his eye on, but she is playing games.

Nice music, nice melody, and great the way you repeat the main hook in the chorus.

You have some very cool lines in it too in your lyrics. If you want to move me emotionally, I have to understand your story better.

Great job on it so far!

December 01, 2018

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Frank Renfordt

Hi Roger,

I like the catchy chorus - a nice sing along! Reminds me a bit to ‘Cotton Eye Joe’ and I would try out the same beat to make the song even more danceable.  As already said by Brent and Reid, the lyric is really clever - but maybe it’s a bit too clever for a commercial song, it’s really hard to connect emotionally with the song.
Keep on!

December 02, 2018


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