What keeps you grounded and makes it harder to tear you up.
I really like the lyric saying that says storms create deeper roots. Love that just so you know. Beautiful.
December 12, 2018
Haydee, I love your feedback. The bridge- absolutely. I need to finish songs better. Yes, there’s a big difference between “tattered” and “tatooed”. “Wheels in the mud” needs to be clearer.
Thank you SO MUCH for taking the time to really dig on this song. -FOX
December 13, 2018
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I like this Fox. Good lyric, I think the tone of the song could be a little quicker tempo, not a lot, it just drags a bit. I agree with Haydee on “sharpen my saw”. You’re obviously good at painting verbal pictures so I know you can do better. Also “tatooed” does not work well, you may mean that she has ‘relationship/life baggage’ or the like, but that is an unattractive visual of someone. how about something like “You came from out of the blue and I keep getting stronger from being with you”, just an idea. “Wheels in the mud”, sounds…muddy, lol. Overall good tune, just a few tweaks and it’ll be great!
January 26, 2019
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aby, boss just gave me the boot
i'm beat up and overused
I know you're tattered too
but I keep getting stronger from being with you
You're
My wheels in the mud
The belt that keeps me up
My shade in the sun
My anchor when I want to run
Baby, together we just can't lose
I'm falling more in love with you
cause storms make trees
Take deeper roots
You're
My line when I can't reach it
My jig when I can't bring it
My net when I can't trap it
My hook when I can't hook it
My more when I I've had enough
When I crack you make me tough
My bring it on when I feel done
My three, two, only one
Baby, together we just can't lose
I'm falling more in love with you
cause storms make trees
Take deeper roots
Baby you sharpen my saw
I've got you, and I've got it all
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Okay, so overall I like the concept and title. The core idea here is that difficulties make us stronger and that it makes our love with our significant other stronger. Most of the lyrics are very well-done and touching. The lyrics 3-2-and only one doesn’t make sense. “You sharpen my saw” is also such a guy thing to say, some might think it’s too peculiar or exclusive but I like it. Also, when I think “wheels in the mud”, I wonder if they are stuck there. Also, the singer sounds like he is saying “tattooed too”, not “tattered too”. I like the word tattered better. Overall, it is a nice song, just needs some tweaking.
December 12, 2018
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I really like the lyric saying that says storms create deeper roots. Love that just so you know. Beautiful.
December 12, 2018
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Haydee, I love your feedback. The bridge- absolutely. I need to finish songs better. Yes, there’s a big difference between “tattered” and “tatooed”. “Wheels in the mud” needs to be clearer.
Thank you SO MUCH for taking the time to really dig on this song. -FOX
December 13, 2018
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I like this Fox. Good lyric, I think the tone of the song could be a little quicker tempo, not a lot, it just drags a bit. I agree with Haydee on “sharpen my saw”. You’re obviously good at painting verbal pictures so I know you can do better. Also “tatooed” does not work well, you may mean that she has ‘relationship/life baggage’ or the like, but that is an unattractive visual of someone. how about something like “You came from out of the blue and I keep getting stronger from being with you”, just an idea. “Wheels in the mud”, sounds…muddy, lol. Overall good tune, just a few tweaks and it’ll be great!
January 26, 2019
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Okay, so overall I like the concept and title. The core idea here is that difficulties make us stronger and that it makes our love with our significant other stronger. Most of the lyrics are very well-done and touching. The lyrics 3-2-and only one doesn’t make sense. “You sharpen my saw” is also such a guy thing to say, some might think it’s too peculiar or exclusive but I like it. Also, when I think “wheels in the mud”, I wonder if they are stuck there. Also, the singer sounds like he is saying “tattooed too”, not “tattered too”. I like the word tattered better. Overall, it is a nice song, just needs some tweaking.
December 12, 2018