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A Hunger Deep Within

Tony True

November 13, 2018

Genre: Country

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The lyrics were started by James Hancock and I have added to them but I still feel the story needs to be set up better. Based on a true story that James saw in his home town where a woman died of an OD while leaving her young son outside alone...very sad.

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Ideas of where to go or how to proceed with this song?....


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Haydee Ahrens

Oh man… if a female sang this, it would really drive the point. Given that we are suffering so much from the opioid epidemic, this could not be more relevant. It hit me deep. Very sad. Imagine a singer like Jewel singing this. I’m lost for words. It probably does need a bit more work but I’m ill-equipped to help because I got a bit caught up in my emotions with this one. My own sister died from an overdose, so I’m sure you will understand.

December 12, 2018

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Alexsi Mallory

Tony, your song is raw and heartbreaking. It’s hard to think about much else after listening to it. I like what Haydee said about a Jewel-type performance. Americana beautiful, delivering the sting of the lyric. The Bridge hits me so hard…Thank you for writing this…

January 05, 2019

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A Hunger Deep Within

Written by Tony True

Make the story more generic about addiction rather than one person…The chorus is pretty good but may need some cleanup after the verses etc are changed.



My son Sam is six years old
They found him outside in the cold
I brought him with me to the park
Said I’d be back...before dark

Pre-chorus
Sad to say I’ve done this before
Ashamed to say I’ve done this before - alternate line
I promised not to do this any more


Chorus
But I have a hunger deep within
That keeps coming back again
I’m searching for that ultimate high
Escaping the pains of my life
And freed from this prison I'm in
Cause I have a hunger deep within

Bridge
Now my son stands (before, beside) next to my grave
I hear him say, mama please don’t leave
I promise to be good you will see
Wish I could tell him I'm the one to blame

Verse
Sam's alone without me and his toys
The state has taken my little boy
They found my body by the tracks
This time I'm not coming back
Pre-chorus
Forgive me for all that I have done
It doesn't mean I didn't love you son



Chorus
But I have a hunger deep within
hat keeps coming back again
I’m searching for that ultimate high
Escaping the pains of my life
And freed from this prison I'm in
Cause I have a hunger deep within
I'm free from this prison I was in
And now this hunger won’t come back again

©James Hancock
Tony True - Sept - 19/20-2014

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Haydee Ahrens

Oh man… if a female sang this, it would really drive the point. Given that we are suffering so much from the opioid epidemic, this could not be more relevant. It hit me deep. Very sad. Imagine a singer like Jewel singing this. I’m lost for words. It probably does need a bit more work but I’m ill-equipped to help because I got a bit caught up in my emotions with this one. My own sister died from an overdose, so I’m sure you will understand.

December 12, 2018

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Alexsi Mallory

Tony, your song is raw and heartbreaking. It’s hard to think about much else after listening to it. I like what Haydee said about a Jewel-type performance. Americana beautiful, delivering the sting of the lyric. The Bridge hits me so hard…Thank you for writing this…

January 05, 2019


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