The song is about women characters made famous in rock and roll songs.
This version is a complete rewrite based on feedback I got from Brent B., Frank R., Dori W., and my other songwriting friends. Thank you all for your time and feedback. Any and all + or -
Hi Lee,
Thank you so much for the second listen, and for your detailed feedback.
While I know what you are talking about, and have learned about it before in my various classes and studies, I have not had experience actually implementing “offbeat vs. onbeat” melodic structures.
Melodic duration I understand, and will go back and analyze it, and see how I can improve.
I will listen to “Walk On By,” and thank you so much for your very detailed feedback on a second listen!
January 28, 2019
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Cruisin’ in the ‘Vette,
The night got better yet.
They’re playin’ Mustang Sally.
Feel like I’ve known her for years,
Even shared a few beers.
A great song will do that to me
Chorus
Those rock and roll women,
Will live on and on.
They live forever in our favorite songs..
Those rock and roll women, never get old
They live in the riffs, the tales they told
When I first met Venus
Felt something between us.
Her beauty would set me free.
I want it, I want it,
she’s got it, she’s got it
A great song will do that to me.
Chorus
Bridge - Guitar solo
Verses 5 & 6
There’s so many more,
I love and adore.
Their songs stuck in my soul.
Josie and Lola,
So nice to know ya
Your great songs did it to me.
Chorus 3X
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Hi Reid,
The picture of Mustang Sally caught my eye. That song was written by one of my influencers, Mack Rice, who also wrote “Respect Yourself” for the Staple Singers.
Anyway, after listening to your song, the verses and chorus are solid. Still, I feel that the song could use more contrast in melodic rhythm between the song sections.
Maybe contrast in rhythmic accents will help. If you get a chance check out Dionne Warwick’s “Walk on By”—- in the verses, the melody notes fall on the beats of the measure, while the hook notes fall on the offbeats.
Also contrast in melodic note duration and phrasing could help bump up the song to another level.
All the best.
January 27, 2019
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Hi Lee,
Thank you so much for the second listen, and for your detailed feedback.
While I know what you are talking about, and have learned about it before in my various classes and studies, I have not had experience actually implementing “offbeat vs. onbeat” melodic structures.
Melodic duration I understand, and will go back and analyze it, and see how I can improve.
I will listen to “Walk On By,” and thank you so much for your very detailed feedback on a second listen!
January 28, 2019
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Lee Myers
Hi Reid,
The picture of Mustang Sally caught my eye. That song was written by one of my influencers, Mack Rice, who also wrote “Respect Yourself” for the Staple Singers.
Anyway, after listening to your song, the verses and chorus are solid. Still, I feel that the song could use more contrast in melodic rhythm between the song sections.
Maybe contrast in rhythmic accents will help. If you get a chance check out Dionne Warwick’s “Walk on By”—- in the verses, the melody notes fall on the beats of the measure, while the hook notes fall on the offbeats.
Also contrast in melodic note duration and phrasing could help bump up the song to another level.
All the best.
January 27, 2019