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Summer ‘s Gone

Frank Renfordt

September 23, 2018

Genre: Country

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It took me about ten re-writes to finish this song, in the end only the hook line and the bridge were left over from my original version and the melody also has changed twice. It's a lesson I had to learn - sometimes it takes really hard efforts to get there. This song has got some attention, among others it was on the NASI Top 40 list.

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Chad Sellers

Hey Frank, I really like the vibe and production on this!
Cool idea. So her name is Summer, right? (I was getting a double meaning there).
I don’t care for the “walking on cloud nine,” I think you can beat that. I like the “raising goose bumps” line. I heard it as “raining goose bumps” the first time, which I like even better than raising. Gives me an image of a light rain/mist dropping the goosebumps onto skin. Use it if you like…..
The final line doesn’t make much sense to me. Maybe because the line it refers back to about a rainy day song isn’t your strongest. You might just bookend the song with the “carolina sky” line. Or lines 1 and 2.
I’d keep working on this. It’s got great potential. The more I look at the lyrics, the more I see words that could be cut or moved to make it more compelling. Cut some of the more “poetic” words especially (like “carressed”).
Sorry my feedback turned into a full page. Haha. Nice work here.

September 24, 2018

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Dori Weaver

Listening now…love the intro and the sultry atmosphere.  It’s great that you got to the chorus so quickly, very strong hook, excellent song!  My only suggestion would be to title it “Cloud Nine.”  Good luck with this..so worth a placement:)

September 24, 2018

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Lisa Caterbone

Beautiful song Frank. I love the production and melody. Lyrics are very nice too. Lots of imagery. I like it!

September 25, 2018

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Richard Kirk

Frank:
As always, so much to like about your efforts. I agree that Cloud Nine is not real strong, on the other hand there are some great images, love the first verse but the second verse confuses me a little as the CH says it’s morning and then it’s all of a sudden at night. She’s already gone.  To me, that could be stated as a recollection better, if that’s what you’re tryin to say.

Also, I’m not 100% positive that her name is “Summer” as Chad thought. It definitely could be, but I’m not sure as it’s only used at the end of the CH. Overall a very strong work.  Keep refining!

October 08, 2018

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Chad Sellers

Hey Frank, I really like the vibe and production on this!
Cool idea. So her name is Summer, right? (I was getting a double meaning there).
I don’t care for the “walking on cloud nine,” I think you can beat that. I like the “raising goose bumps” line. I heard it as “raining goose bumps” the first time, which I like even better than raising. Gives me an image of a light rain/mist dropping the goosebumps onto skin. Use it if you like…..
The final line doesn’t make much sense to me. Maybe because the line it refers back to about a rainy day song isn’t your strongest. You might just bookend the song with the “carolina sky” line. Or lines 1 and 2.
I’d keep working on this. It’s got great potential. The more I look at the lyrics, the more I see words that could be cut or moved to make it more compelling. Cut some of the more “poetic” words especially (like “carressed”).
Sorry my feedback turned into a full page. Haha. Nice work here.

September 24, 2018

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Dori Weaver

Listening now…love the intro and the sultry atmosphere.  It’s great that you got to the chorus so quickly, very strong hook, excellent song!  My only suggestion would be to title it “Cloud Nine.”  Good luck with this..so worth a placement:)

September 24, 2018

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Lisa Caterbone

Beautiful song Frank. I love the production and melody. Lyrics are very nice too. Lots of imagery. I like it!

September 25, 2018

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Richard Kirk

Frank:
As always, so much to like about your efforts. I agree that Cloud Nine is not real strong, on the other hand there are some great images, love the first verse but the second verse confuses me a little as the CH says it’s morning and then it’s all of a sudden at night. She’s already gone.  To me, that could be stated as a recollection better, if that’s what you’re tryin to say.

Also, I’m not 100% positive that her name is “Summer” as Chad thought. It definitely could be, but I’m not sure as it’s only used at the end of the CH. Overall a very strong work.  Keep refining!

October 08, 2018


Summer ‘s Gone

Written by Frank Renfordt

Carolina sky is fading to grey
and the pier on the beach clouded in mist
With tears in hear eyes she sighed it’s okay
leaving me with a lump in my throat and a farewell kiss

When we were walking on cloud nine
I thought the sun would always shine
now the radio 's playin' a rainy day song
and time 's moving on
A northern breeze is blowin' in
raising goose bumps on my skin
a roosters crowing in the foggy dawn
sweet summer 's gone

Tanned skin glowing dusky in the moonlight
with all my senses drinking her in
Learning all the secrets of a magic night
caressed by the gentle whisper of a southern wind

When were walking on cloud nine
I thought the sun would always shine
now the radio 's playin' a rainy day song
and time 's moving on
A northern breeze is blowin' in
raising goose bumps on my skin
a roosters crowing in the foggy dawn
sweet summer 's gone

Diving so deep and flying so high
it felt so wrong to say goodbye

When we were walking on cloud nine
I thought the sun would always shine
now the radio 's playin' a rainy day song
and time 's moving on
A northern breeze is blowin' in
raising goose bumps on my skin
a roosters crowing in the foggy dawn
sweet summer 's gone

and radio 's playin' a last summer song

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