When you get into a situation that life kinda flashes before your eyes and you get a scare whether it be from a rough plane landing(which did happen) or you are driving and have to break suddenly or you hear gun shots somewhere and you think of the ones you love the most and how you will get to them no matter what adversity is before you...
This is a co-write with Emily Hatton, also from melbourne, australia.
Altho i am singing on this track, i m not looking to be a singer/songwriter, i just love writing songs and demoing them.
Hey Bob thanks for your feedback, i appreciate you took the time to listen and share your thoughts, all the best to you
September 01, 2018
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Hi Michael, I like your song, it has as good structure, sections are well separated, the chorus is catchy, nice lyric. The only thing I wonder about is that you posted this as a Pop song - I think this a typical Country Song and if you consider to make a full demo I would recommend to produce it as a Contemporary Country Song.
September 02, 2018
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Hi Frank, thanks very much for dropping by and taking the time to listen and give feedback. Great question about the ‘pop’ song. I’ve submitted a few songs to NSAI for evaluation and my style of writing was described as more pop than country so i guess i put it up as a pop song but i’ve changed it now as it suits the contemporary country more than pop, cheers
September 03, 2018
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Michael, thanks for sharing this song. Cool, cool, cool opening line, bro: “The plane touched down like a hammer to the ground”, good imagery. You did some cool things with giving visuals in your verses, “reading by the fire”, the screeching sound of the brakes (sight, sound, taste, touch, smell, etc.), and I like your hook idea of “I’ll get to you”. Your voice is cool and it fits the sound and feel of the song, and I wouldn’t worry about coming up with different chords for the verses than what you have for the chorus. There are plenty of hit songs on the radio these days that use the same chords in the verse that they do in the chorus (Body Like A Back Road and House Party by Sam Hunt); the key is making them sound different, and that you accomplish with production and instrumental tweaks that you can do, no worries there. The few things I feel like you could work on in the song would be to watch your verb tense in the verses. Your chorus is in straight present tense, but in the first verse you slide from past tense (plane touched down…) to present (heart skips a beat…); here, as long as you pick one (past or present) and go with it, you should be good, no big deal. Maybe you could do something like this:
“The plane touched down like a hammer to the ground
And my heart SKIPPED a beat
My whole world STOPPED when I THOUGHT of you
AND NOW I see…” something like that, does that make sense? ‘Cuz the rest of those lines is you seeing her in your mind (present tense), so you can leave them the way they are. You can do the same thing in your second verse, too.
The other thing I thought you might try is to see if you could add or change in a line in your chorus to lead to that payoff of your hook (GET TO YOU)...right now, you have the first two lines saying essentially that life is unpredictable, anything can happen, nothing you can do about it, (and then the last two lines are) but whatever it takes, I’ll get to you…what I was thinking was your hook GET TO YOU is powerful, and I see in my mind’s eye you clawing your way through mountains, dodging tornadoes, and even facing off with death himself swinging his sickle at you as you duck and do a side-wipe move and run past him to GET TO YOUR GIRL. In other words, nothing will stop you from getting to her. I know that may sound a little corny, and I know you can come up with some cool imagery to match that idea, but that’s just what I was seeing in my mind with those lines.
Hope that helps. Thanks again, Michael, for sharing this song.Some cool images in those verse, and I like that hook!
September 13, 2018
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Hi Kris, thanks for taking the time to listen to my song. I really appreciate your feedback and ideas. I recently had a mentor session with mason douglas from nsai and we went over this song and since then i’ve made some changes and definitely agree on the chorus but i wasn’t quite sure of how to get a bit more imagery into the chorus but i will keep digging so the Hook drives home a bit more, your suggestion isn’t corny at all, i get it. Admittedly, lyrics isn’t and probably hasn’t been my strength as i’ve been more of a melody/music guy but i am working to getting my lyrics stronger so i dig the english lesson as well and appreciate it.
Thanks again for sharing your thoughts with me
Cheers
September 16, 2018
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No worries, bro. Great to hear you’re really digging into this song. I think you have a really cool idea with this one. I have to work on lyrics a lot myself, not one of my strengths either. That’s why I co-write with other people who are better at it than I am, lol. Best of luck to you, Michael.
I’m anxious to hear your re-write of this one, if you get a chance to share it when you have it ready.
September 21, 2018
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I really like the lyrics on this song. Very catchy, well written. I can definitely hear this song produced in a country pop format and feel it has a great chance of getting cut. Good luck Michael!
September 25, 2018
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Hey Lisa thanks for your feedback and positive vibes, really appreciate that very much.
Hey Kris, been digging away at the chorus and should have something soon.
Cheers
October 04, 2018
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The plane touched down like a hammer to the ground
And my heart skips a beat
My whole world stops I think of you
The only thing I see
You’re Sitting on the couch reading by the fire
Smiling back at me
Well I thank the lord
That i’m goin’ home to everything I need
Chorus
Life can throw a curveball, or drive you off the road
Sometimes you’re in control, sometimes you just gotta let go
With a little bit of faith, whatever it takes
I’ll get to you, I’ll get to you
Drivin’ down town I hear a screeching sound
The truck ahead brakes suddenly
My whole world stops I think of you
And the only thing i see
Are those winter nights, pumpkin spice
And our morning routine
I know in times like these
your loving arms is where i wanna be
Chorus
(So) Life can throw a curveball, or drive you off the road
Sometimes you’re in control, sometimes you just gotta let go
With a little bit of faith, whatever it takes
I’ll get to you, I’ll get to you
Rain or shine, you’re my peace of mind
I swear, all my life I’ve been dying to get to you
I hear shots ring out as i’m standin’ in a crowd,
My heart skips a beat
The whole world stops but you’re standing there:
Everything i need
Chorus
Life can throw a curveball, or drive you off the road
Sometimes you’re in control, sometimes you just don’t know
You’re the one who gives me faith
And for the rest of my days I’ll get to, I’ll get to you,
Life can throw a curveball, or drive you off the road
Sometimes you’re in control, sometimes you just gotta let go
With a little bit of faith, whatever it takes
I’ll get to you, I’ll get to you,
Get to you, Get to you, Get to you, Get to you
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Good solid lyrics, good subject matter, nice personal feel, vocal intonation is decent (a little touchy on occasion, not enough to distract)—really, the only thing is the fact that you use the same four chords over and over and over—would suggest keeping chords the same on the chorus and use different chords on the verses)—best wishes in all your songwriting endeavors!!!
August 30, 2018
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Hey Bob thanks for your feedback, i appreciate you took the time to listen and share your thoughts, all the best to you
September 01, 2018
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Hi Michael, I like your song, it has as good structure, sections are well separated, the chorus is catchy, nice lyric. The only thing I wonder about is that you posted this as a Pop song - I think this a typical Country Song and if you consider to make a full demo I would recommend to produce it as a Contemporary Country Song.
September 02, 2018
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Hi Frank, thanks very much for dropping by and taking the time to listen and give feedback. Great question about the ‘pop’ song. I’ve submitted a few songs to NSAI for evaluation and my style of writing was described as more pop than country so i guess i put it up as a pop song but i’ve changed it now as it suits the contemporary country more than pop, cheers
September 03, 2018
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Michael, thanks for sharing this song. Cool, cool, cool opening line, bro: “The plane touched down like a hammer to the ground”, good imagery. You did some cool things with giving visuals in your verses, “reading by the fire”, the screeching sound of the brakes (sight, sound, taste, touch, smell, etc.), and I like your hook idea of “I’ll get to you”. Your voice is cool and it fits the sound and feel of the song, and I wouldn’t worry about coming up with different chords for the verses than what you have for the chorus. There are plenty of hit songs on the radio these days that use the same chords in the verse that they do in the chorus (Body Like A Back Road and House Party by Sam Hunt); the key is making them sound different, and that you accomplish with production and instrumental tweaks that you can do, no worries there. The few things I feel like you could work on in the song would be to watch your verb tense in the verses. Your chorus is in straight present tense, but in the first verse you slide from past tense (plane touched down…) to present (heart skips a beat…); here, as long as you pick one (past or present) and go with it, you should be good, no big deal. Maybe you could do something like this:
“The plane touched down like a hammer to the ground
And my heart SKIPPED a beat
My whole world STOPPED when I THOUGHT of you
AND NOW I see…” something like that, does that make sense? ‘Cuz the rest of those lines is you seeing her in your mind (present tense), so you can leave them the way they are. You can do the same thing in your second verse, too.
The other thing I thought you might try is to see if you could add or change in a line in your chorus to lead to that payoff of your hook (GET TO YOU)...right now, you have the first two lines saying essentially that life is unpredictable, anything can happen, nothing you can do about it, (and then the last two lines are) but whatever it takes, I’ll get to you…what I was thinking was your hook GET TO YOU is powerful, and I see in my mind’s eye you clawing your way through mountains, dodging tornadoes, and even facing off with death himself swinging his sickle at you as you duck and do a side-wipe move and run past him to GET TO YOUR GIRL. In other words, nothing will stop you from getting to her. I know that may sound a little corny, and I know you can come up with some cool imagery to match that idea, but that’s just what I was seeing in my mind with those lines.
Hope that helps. Thanks again, Michael, for sharing this song.Some cool images in those verse, and I like that hook!
September 13, 2018
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Hi Kris, thanks for taking the time to listen to my song. I really appreciate your feedback and ideas. I recently had a mentor session with mason douglas from nsai and we went over this song and since then i’ve made some changes and definitely agree on the chorus but i wasn’t quite sure of how to get a bit more imagery into the chorus but i will keep digging so the Hook drives home a bit more, your suggestion isn’t corny at all, i get it. Admittedly, lyrics isn’t and probably hasn’t been my strength as i’ve been more of a melody/music guy but i am working to getting my lyrics stronger so i dig the english lesson as well and appreciate it.
Thanks again for sharing your thoughts with me
Cheers
September 16, 2018
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No worries, bro. Great to hear you’re really digging into this song. I think you have a really cool idea with this one. I have to work on lyrics a lot myself, not one of my strengths either. That’s why I co-write with other people who are better at it than I am, lol. Best of luck to you, Michael.
I’m anxious to hear your re-write of this one, if you get a chance to share it when you have it ready.
September 21, 2018
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I really like the lyrics on this song. Very catchy, well written. I can definitely hear this song produced in a country pop format and feel it has a great chance of getting cut. Good luck Michael!
September 25, 2018
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Hey Lisa thanks for your feedback and positive vibes, really appreciate that very much.
Hey Kris, been digging away at the chorus and should have something soon.
Cheers
October 04, 2018
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Bob Abner
Good solid lyrics, good subject matter, nice personal feel, vocal intonation is decent (a little touchy on occasion, not enough to distract)—really, the only thing is the fact that you use the same four chords over and over and over—would suggest keeping chords the same on the chorus and use different chords on the verses)—best wishes in all your songwriting endeavors!!!
August 30, 2018
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