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Fire in The Ice (Revised)

Jolene Cheyney

June 03, 2018

Genre: Pop

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Ditalian Cole

What an interesting title! Made me want to know what the song was all about. However, the pronouns confused me. I’m not sure I understand who the she, he, I, and you are. It’s a cool idea, but could stand another rewrite.

June 11, 2018

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Ditalian Cole

What an interesting title! Made me want to know what the song was all about. However, the pronouns confused me. I’m not sure I understand who the she, he, I, and you are. It’s a cool idea, but could stand another rewrite.

June 11, 2018


Fire in The Ice (Revised)

Written by Jolene Cheyney

EDIT 6-2-18
Fire in the Ice
Verse:
To touch her left you reeling
Feel the nip and chill
There's a fire she's been concealing ,
The blaze is burning still.

Chorus:
Can you see it in my eyes?
The fire in the ice
The fire in the ice
The fire in the ice

Verse:
The ice is part of her armor
To protect a heart so precious
It won't be taken by any charmer
He must prove he's not dangerous

Chorus:
Can you see it in my eyes?
The fire in the ice
The fire in the ice
The fire in the ice

Verse:
The salt in the tears you shed
Begins to melt through
Not sadness, but tenderness instead
If she gives her heart, will you be true?

Bridge:
Kiss, Kiss
Sparks fly, Ooh...
Sparks fly, Ooh...
There's fire inside the ice
The ice . . . The ice . . . The ice . . .

Chorus:
Can you see it in my eyes?
The fire in the ice
The fire in the ice
The fire in the ice

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