This was basically my very first song (A "Poor Me" song); one that I wrote as I dropped out of college, following a divorce. I found work quickly in a band (keyboard) and sang this song with a nice reception. However, it never seemed quite finished. But, about 2 years ago, I got an idea similar to Brad Paisley's introduction to Waitin' On A Woman with Andy Griffith, when an old friend called to tell me he'd be in my area and wondered if we could get together for a brew. So, I added a new introduction to my 47-year-old song.
So nice to read your response to my song, Jayne Sachs! I would love to hear/read your suggestions to my song! Unfortunately, I had to put my music passions on hold about 6 years ago, due to my day job. So, my vocals are less than desirable. However, I’d love to implement your suggestions with a vocalist like Matt Dame. Thanks again for taking time to respond to my song!!
May 31, 2018
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Hi Jack,
I like the lyrics, it sounds true and right from the heart. However I don’t think that this song has big commercial potential in todays market, it’s a bit dated what doesn’t wonder, as you wrote it a long time ago. Nevertheless good work!
June 01, 2018
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Good song, Jack. I can tell from the lyric that you lived this song. However, there are spots where the lyric is awkward and not conversational. like in the lines, “over all things ever known,” and “you shared in what you earned”
June 11, 2018
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DID YOU EVER HAVE A SON (written by Jack Speer & vocals by Jack Speer, produced by John D. Willis):
IT WAS DAMN NEAR 4 DECADES,
SINCE WE SHARED THOSE GLORY DAYS,
ON THAT OL' GRID IRON AT FSU.
WHEN I FOUND MYSELF IN HIS HOMETOWN,
IN A PUB WE HAD A ROUND,
AS I ASKED, “OLD FRIEND,
WHAT’S UP WITH YOU?”
HE KEPT HIS EYES GLUED TO HIS DRINK,
LIKE THE TRUTH WAS IN HIS GLASS,
THEN HE SAID,
“THAT CALLS FOR ANOTHER ROUND!”
AS HE LOOKED UP FROM HIS BREW AND ASKED,
“DID YOU EVER HAVE A WIFE?
DID YOU EVER HAVE A WIFE?
DID YOU THINK YOU WOULD LOVE HER,
FOR THE REST OF YOUR LIFE?
DID YOU EVER HAVE A SON?
DID YOU EVER HAVE A SON?
WHEN COMPARED TO ANY OTHER CHILD,
HE WAS ALWAYS NUMBER ONE.
DID YOU EVER HAVE A HOME?
DID YOU EVER HAVE A HOME?
THOUGH KIND WORDS WERE SELDOM USED,
YOU NEVER CARED TO ROAM.
WERE YOU EVER ASKED TO LEAVE,
NEVER TO RETURN?
THOUGH NOTHING EVER CUT SO DEEP,
YOU SHARED IN WHAT YOU EARNED.
DID YOU EVER HAVE A WIFE?
DID YOU EVER HAVE A SON?
THEY SAY, "NOTHING LASTS FOREVER,
THAT ALL THINGS HAVE AN END,"
AND THOUGH I SOMETIMES STILL THINK ABOUT HER,
I KNOW THIS BROKEN HEART WILL MEND.
BUT, DESPITE THESE SIMPLE TRUTHS OF LIFE,
OVER ALL THINGS EVER KNOWN,
NO MATTER WHAT THE FUTURE BRINGS,
HE’LL FOREVER BE MY SON.
DID YOU EVER HAVE A HOME?
DID YOU EVER HAVE A HOME?
THOUGH KIND WORDS WEREN’T OFTEN USED,
YOU NEVER CARED TO ROAM.
WERE YOU EVER ASKED TO LEAVE,
NEVER TO RETURN?
THOUGH NOTHING EVER CUT SO DEEP,
YOU SHARED IN WHAT YOU EARNED.
DID YOU EVER HAVE A WIFE?
DID YOU EVER HAVE A SON?”
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I like this Jack. It’s moving. If you were trying to make it as commercial as possible, I could offer suggestions… but this seems very straight from your heart as is. Knowing it’s your story makes me feel it even more. Good job.
May 31, 2018
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So nice to read your response to my song, Jayne Sachs! I would love to hear/read your suggestions to my song! Unfortunately, I had to put my music passions on hold about 6 years ago, due to my day job. So, my vocals are less than desirable. However, I’d love to implement your suggestions with a vocalist like Matt Dame. Thanks again for taking time to respond to my song!!
May 31, 2018
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Hi Jack,
I like the lyrics, it sounds true and right from the heart. However I don’t think that this song has big commercial potential in todays market, it’s a bit dated what doesn’t wonder, as you wrote it a long time ago. Nevertheless good work!
June 01, 2018
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Good song, Jack. I can tell from the lyric that you lived this song. However, there are spots where the lyric is awkward and not conversational. like in the lines, “over all things ever known,” and “you shared in what you earned”
June 11, 2018
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Jayne Sachs
I like this Jack. It’s moving. If you were trying to make it as commercial as possible, I could offer suggestions… but this seems very straight from your heart as is. Knowing it’s your story makes me feel it even more. Good job.
May 31, 2018