(REVISIT ALL OF THIS, written by Jack Speer, sung by Matt Dame, produced by John D. Willis):
From feedback provided at a local NSAI (Nashville Songwriters Association International) meeting, I was basically trying to “paint a verbal picture;” to be as descriptive as possible. I had no particular emotional connection to this song, other than my trying to recall some of the significant details of a coming-of-age period in my life, while growing up in a small town.
Dude Jack, Great written song!
I really love the choices you made with the chorus melody.
it sounds like a Blake Shelton cut to me!
May 23, 2018
Hi Frank,
Your comments have been very substantive and much appreciated! Thank you for listening so intently and for sharing so much of your time to offer such candid, detailed feedback! I have listened to your tracks associated with Matt Dame and will respond to them separately on their specific feedback spaces. Again, much thanks!!!
May 24, 2018
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Thank you, Evan Bingham! Funny you mention Blake, as I had thought of him, too. But, I don’t know the ropes in terms of making that connection. I look forward to reviewing your songs and I will certainly comment when I do.
Again, many thanks!!!
May 24, 2018
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Pretty solid—the only small thing I noticed is the pause between “Surrendered innocence” and “Your intoxicating kiss” seemed a little too long and a little awkward. I do think this is a good song.
August 12, 2018
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I want to drive back to our hometown;
Want to ride down those old streets,
With my windows down, so I can smell the air.
I want to hear old sounds of Motown,
As I recall memories,
Of those younger days, you and I once shared.
That orange blossom’s scent,
Surrendered innocence;
Your intoxicating kiss.
The two of us alone,
The thrill of the unknown;
I want to re-visit all of this…
I want to wait till just past sundown,
At that boathouse on the lake,
Where reflections of the moon lit up your tan.
While cicadas sang their love songs,
To the rhythm of the waves,
As they splashed on us and on the lake shore sand.
That orange blossom’s scent,
Surrendered innocence;
Your intoxicating kiss.
The two of us alone,
The thrill of the unknown;
I want to re-visit all of this…
Like a fire that’s found its flame,
From a trace of dying embers;
Baby, we can do the same,
All it takes is to remember
That orange blossom’s scent,
Surrendered innocence;
Your intoxicating kiss.
The two of us alone,
The thrill of the unknown;
Wish we could re-visit all of this…
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Hi Jack,
ha - again Matt Dame! Good work, great imagery, certainly the best of the songs you have posted regarding commercial viability.
May 22, 2018
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Dude Jack, Great written song!
I really love the choices you made with the chorus melody.
it sounds like a Blake Shelton cut to me!
May 23, 2018
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Hi Frank,
Your comments have been very substantive and much appreciated! Thank you for listening so intently and for sharing so much of your time to offer such candid, detailed feedback! I have listened to your tracks associated with Matt Dame and will respond to them separately on their specific feedback spaces. Again, much thanks!!!
May 24, 2018
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Thank you, Evan Bingham! Funny you mention Blake, as I had thought of him, too. But, I don’t know the ropes in terms of making that connection. I look forward to reviewing your songs and I will certainly comment when I do.
Again, many thanks!!!
May 24, 2018
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Pretty solid—the only small thing I noticed is the pause between “Surrendered innocence” and “Your intoxicating kiss” seemed a little too long and a little awkward. I do think this is a good song.
August 12, 2018
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Frank Renfordt
Hi Jack,
ha - again Matt Dame! Good work, great imagery, certainly the best of the songs you have posted regarding commercial viability.
May 22, 2018