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I’m gonna learn to swim

Frank Renfordt

May 18, 2018

Genre: Folk

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Every year hundreds of refugees drown in search of a life of peace and freedom in the Mediterranean. These people have no lobby. Many people in Europe think without saying so - better they drown than they come to our country. Yes, the world is cynical. I was trying to change perspective here. It's a serious song.

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Jack Speer

Hi Frank,
Before I can remark on your song, I must first admit to my shortcoming of being unfamiliar with your accent (as well as some auto-tune or other type of audio affects), which made it difficult for me to understand the lyric to your song.  Thankfully, your lyric is attached.  And, as I listened a second time, I was quite impressed as things became clearer and the tune became embedded.  However, I was still somewhat confused.  So, I read the information, “About This Song,” and listened yet a 3rd time and I was quite moved!  Obviously, there are world-wide, complex issues regarding immigration and it’s sad that some people are disadvantaged, simply because of where they were born.  Although Your song doesn’t fix the problem, it certainly sheds light on it!  Nice job; NICE SONG!!!  Thanks for sharing!

May 21, 2018

Frank Renfordt

Hi Jack, thank you for your feedback. I have to confess if you are not that familiar with the issue, it might take some time to understand the lyric. People in Europe will more easily relate to. Immigration is an increasing big problem without any solution in sight.
In parts of Africa and Asia people are struggling to stay alive, but they watch on TV and on the web the luxury and peaceful life we live in western Europe.They pay all they have to smugglers and risk their lives to come with overloaded boats across the sea and every year some of these boats capsize and hundreds drown in the sea. And when they finally make it to the European coasts, they have to realize that they are not welcome.

May 23, 2018

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Haydee Ahrens

This is definitely a very difficult issue with many sides. There is one side who wishes to honor and preserve the humanity of the immigrant and accept an almost unlimited number of them without any requirements or expectations. They feel this will rectify unjust occupations and colonialism from the past. Then there is the other side that is pragmatic and realizes that yes, these are precious humans, but it’s wrong to expect that they will be willing to leave their hostility/anti-semitism, anti-women beliefs behind. How do you reconcile ancient and inhumane practices with modern liberal values that uphold equality?Many will adapt to Western culture and many won’t. They bring practices that are abhorrent to many females/minorities/children. How do we deal with this?
I feel your song definitely puts a spotlight on this issue and makes the main character very sympathetic. You definitely helped us see his humanity and also did this without vilifying those who are opposed to more immigration. The melody had a bittersweet quality and the lyrics flowed well. Obviously this issue weighs heavy on your heart, it shows. I agree, we have to figure this out.

May 25, 2018

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Frank Renfordt

Haydee - thank you for your feedback and for your thoughts. You have this issue outlined pretty good. I wanted to show that these people are just humans, with hopes, fears and dreams and I am happy to hear that the song works.

May 25, 2018

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Jack Speer

Hi Frank,
Before I can remark on your song, I must first admit to my shortcoming of being unfamiliar with your accent (as well as some auto-tune or other type of audio affects), which made it difficult for me to understand the lyric to your song.  Thankfully, your lyric is attached.  And, as I listened a second time, I was quite impressed as things became clearer and the tune became embedded.  However, I was still somewhat confused.  So, I read the information, “About This Song,” and listened yet a 3rd time and I was quite moved!  Obviously, there are world-wide, complex issues regarding immigration and it’s sad that some people are disadvantaged, simply because of where they were born.  Although Your song doesn’t fix the problem, it certainly sheds light on it!  Nice job; NICE SONG!!!  Thanks for sharing!

May 21, 2018

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Frank Renfordt

Hi Jack, thank you for your feedback. I have to confess if you are not that familiar with the issue, it might take some time to understand the lyric. People in Europe will more easily relate to. Immigration is an increasing big problem without any solution in sight.
In parts of Africa and Asia people are struggling to stay alive, but they watch on TV and on the web the luxury and peaceful life we live in western Europe.They pay all they have to smugglers and risk their lives to come with overloaded boats across the sea and every year some of these boats capsize and hundreds drown in the sea. And when they finally make it to the European coasts, they have to realize that they are not welcome.

May 23, 2018

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Haydee Ahrens

This is definitely a very difficult issue with many sides. There is one side who wishes to honor and preserve the humanity of the immigrant and accept an almost unlimited number of them without any requirements or expectations. They feel this will rectify unjust occupations and colonialism from the past. Then there is the other side that is pragmatic and realizes that yes, these are precious humans, but it’s wrong to expect that they will be willing to leave their hostility/anti-semitism, anti-women beliefs behind. How do you reconcile ancient and inhumane practices with modern liberal values that uphold equality?Many will adapt to Western culture and many won’t. They bring practices that are abhorrent to many females/minorities/children. How do we deal with this?
I feel your song definitely puts a spotlight on this issue and makes the main character very sympathetic. You definitely helped us see his humanity and also did this without vilifying those who are opposed to more immigration. The melody had a bittersweet quality and the lyrics flowed well. Obviously this issue weighs heavy on your heart, it shows. I agree, we have to figure this out.

May 25, 2018

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Frank Renfordt

Haydee - thank you for your feedback and for your thoughts. You have this issue outlined pretty good. I wanted to show that these people are just humans, with hopes, fears and dreams and I am happy to hear that the song works.

May 25, 2018


I’m gonna learn to...

Written by Frank Renfordt

Gunfire echoing in the dark night
you're still asleep here by my side
used to the terror your tender soul scarred
and leaving you now really tears me apart
but I gave all our savings away
to the smuggler and for better days

I have to go now, little sister
don't worry I'll see you again
take good care of your mother
and beware of the dirty old men
I'll give you a call little sister
when I've found a job in Berlin
no, I will not drown like our brother
the ocean is deep but I'm gonna learn to swim

I will send some money as soon as I'm through
they will grant me asylum and I'll come for you
I will pick you up no way is too far
and drive you around in a luxury car
I promise we will have a ball
keep brave and wait for my call

I have to go now, little sister
don't worry I'll see you again
take good care of your mother
and beware of the dirty old men
I'll give you a call little sister
when I've found a job in Berlin
no, I will not drown like our brother
the ocean is deep but I'm gonna learn to swim

A crying heart, a lying sun
an embittered soul, a kid with a gun
blood-soaked rubble piled up to hills
I don't wanna die, I don't wanna kill

I have to go now, little sister
don't worry I'll see you again
take good care of your mother
and beware of the dirty old men
I'll give you a call little sister
when I've found a job in Berlin
no, I will not drown like our brother
the ocean is deep but I'm gonna learn to swim

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