My girlfriend wrote a poem when she was very young and I turned it into a song
mainly production
First of all, you are such a character. Your voice is one of a kind. This sounds very sweet. Pretty good poem, especially considering she was pretty young. The melody is lovely. I enjoyed it.
May 16, 2018
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Thanks, hardest song ever for me to sing, more complicated then most of what I record.
May 16, 2018
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I OFFER You MY LOVE (JESSICA'S SONG)
words by Jessica Guber Music by Happy Ron
I offer you my love, as summer grasses grow
Always flowing always loving
Always stretching up
while brushing against your soul
with the softest touch
I offer you my love, as the ocean blue
Always blessing And Caressing your
Y' Every grain of sand
Tiding according to
Each wave of your hand
I will be your shelter from whatever weather,
your Hideaway away in the night and the day
I offer you a harbor you'd sail through
to quietly leave then lovingly return.. TO
I offer you my love. as the universe
Always present always glowing
lighting up your mood
warming and making new
your every attitude
Yes I offer my love. Do you ?
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First of all, you are such a character. Your voice is one of a kind. This sounds very sweet. Pretty good poem, especially considering she was pretty young. The melody is lovely. I enjoyed it.
May 16, 2018
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Thanks, hardest song ever for me to sing, more complicated then most of what I record.
May 16, 2018
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Wonderful video of song here: https://youtu.be/6rzOosdQBZE
May 16, 2018
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