First verse loosely based on true story. My brother takes care of his wife, though she is not bedridden as such. amazing what all he does for her. Sung from a likely young adult grandchild's point of view.
You will see an alternate verse at the end, I 'm wondering if that's better than the current second verse. Also wonder if the end of the bridge is too obscure, i. e. "Fly Me to the Moon" reference. Tnanks
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THAT’S WHAT FOREVER MEANS
Went over to Grandpa’s house last week, hadn’t been there for a while
He was busy taking care of Grandma, but he gave me a little smile
He helped her eat, checked her blood, gave her a shot in the arm
I asked him how he could do all that, he said, “ It’s not that hard”
Cause I have to take care of her in sickness and in health
She always did the same for me when I wasn’t well
It’s all about ‘through thick and thin’ and everything in between
THAT’S WHAT FOREVER MEANS”
I looked more closely around the room, saw the fabric of their lives
Wallpaper roses and forget-me-nots there by her bedside
A faded picture of their wedding day in 1952
He said, “After all she’s done for me, this is the least that I can do
CH
He lit a lavender candle and put on some classic tunes
They sang along with Sinatra, and flew all the way to the moon
CH
(alternate 2nd verse)
He said,” When we got married, I got a job, worked my fingers to the bone
Did all I could to provide for her and make a happy home
I got laid off in 67, we struggled to make ends meet
Somehow we survived that time, and got back on our feet
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Hi Richard,
all in all the story works well for me. I like the second verse (not the alternate verse) more than the first one because it is more descriptive. It’s easier to relate to the song if you show things. You could dig a bit deeper into emotions, being a bit more sentimental. I don’t think that ‘fly me to the moon’ is too obscure, but if you would use an image which relates more to ‘looking back to the time gone’ it would have a better impact. These are just my thoughts. Keep on - Frank
May 07, 2018
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Frank Renfordt
Hi Richard,
all in all the story works well for me. I like the second verse (not the alternate verse) more than the first one because it is more descriptive. It’s easier to relate to the song if you show things. You could dig a bit deeper into emotions, being a bit more sentimental. I don’t think that ‘fly me to the moon’ is too obscure, but if you would use an image which relates more to ‘looking back to the time gone’ it would have a better impact. These are just my thoughts. Keep on - Frank
May 07, 2018
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