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When Will it Stop?

Haydee Ahrens

April 26, 2018

Genre: Pop

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Lyrics and Melody by: Haydee Ahrens





A sort of #metoo song.
I want this out there so people can better understand what a victim of sexual abuse feels like, especially when they are blamed, looked down on, and they get no justice for what was done to them. I wish that no one else would ever have to feel this way again. I wish these things would never happen again. With that being said, we know that as long as there is evil in the world, sexual abuse will continue. If you are reading this, please consider advocating for legislation to be put in place that would ensure that all rapists, pedophiles, and sexual abusers would be put away or institutionalized for the rest of their lives without any chance of being released. They rarely regret what they do and the men who abused me went on to abuse others. They never stop.




No matter what we experience here, in the end, GOD WINS. Some people are not going to be too happy about that, but I will be. GOD WINS, Jesus is Lord.

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Frank Renfordt

Hi Haydee - a nice tune, very emotional. I like ‘Candy with poison within’  - a great line. I wonder if ‘Poisoned Candy’  would be a more interesting title for the song.
You didn’t use any rhyming in the chorus what at first hearing sounded a bit strange to me, but I have to commit that I’m not sure if a lot of rhyming would be appropriate. However I think in the hook line it would make it more memorable.

May 01, 2018

Bad Felon

I like it! This could be a number for a musical, too!

May 01, 2018

Brian Lee Robinson

Haydee,
I like it. Great feel for the subject. Great message. I agree it would be good for a musical or a movie soundtrack. Only a year writing? Excellent work. Poison from within, great line.
Brian

May 03, 2018

Haydee Ahrens

Thank you all so much for your input. This was not an easy song to share and I appreciate your input. Frank, I agree that it doesn’t rhyme in the chorus. Generally, I prefer most lyrics to rhyme at some point. If something comes to me that has more rhyming words, I definitely will consider it. This feels right at this time but I’m open to change. Chris, I have considered that it might be good in a film or theater as well. Brian, I really appreciate that you liked the feel of it. I will always try to release more hopeful songs. I am putting this out here only so that more can understand how people feel when they have had their rights violated in a specific way. It changes you. That’s undeniable. Like the song says, “God save me… I’m waiting for that day.” I’m waiting for the day that He heals all of those that are willing to healed within the human race. Those of us who know the true and living God know that He won’t impose Himself in any way. May He heal us all in a timely manner.

May 07, 2018

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Reid Yamamoto

Awesome song, great lyrics and piano arrangement, and your voice sounds amazing! So expressive and I’m sure having music to sing to helped you to up your performance of this great recording!

August 27, 2018

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When Will it Stop?

Written by Haydee Ahrens

When Will it Stop?

It has been steady,
This pain, it has endured,
You can't silence
All those that you've hurt.
And I-
I've tried to escape this
But the cut is too deep.
It is infected,
I'm so tormented,
I can't sleep,
It is infected,
I'm so tormented,
I can't sleep.

When will it stop
When will it end?
You've had enough fun.
I tried to live my life but I
Can't anymore.
You think you can do what you want,
You're just this Candy man.
You give away so much candy,
It has poison within.

The sad thing is that
you would smile if you knew,
About all the heartache,
That you put us through
And I-
I think that it is time
To be put in your place.
And when you sleep,
And when you sleep,
I hope you see my face,
And when you sleep,
And when you sleep,
I hope you see my face.

When will it stop
When will it end?
You've had enough fun,
I tried to live my life
But I can't anymore.
You think you can do what you want,
You're just this Candy man,
You give away so much candy,
It has poison within.

God save me,
This rage is eating me away
Way, way deep,
Way deep
For you to save, save me,
This rage is eating me away,
I'm waiting for that day,
I'm waiting for that day.

When will it stop?
When will it end?
You've had enough fun,
I tried to live my life
But I can't anymore!
You think you can do
What you want!
You're just this Candy man,
You give away so much candy,
It has poison within!
It has poison within!
It has poison within----

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Frank Renfordt

Hi Haydee - a nice tune, very emotional. I like ‘Candy with poison within’  - a great line. I wonder if ‘Poisoned Candy’  would be a more interesting title for the song.
You didn’t use any rhyming in the chorus what at first hearing sounded a bit strange to me, but I have to commit that I’m not sure if a lot of rhyming would be appropriate. However I think in the hook line it would make it more memorable.

May 01, 2018

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Bad Felon

I like it! This could be a number for a musical, too!

May 01, 2018

1

Brian Lee Robinson

Haydee,
I like it. Great feel for the subject. Great message. I agree it would be good for a musical or a movie soundtrack. Only a year writing? Excellent work. Poison from within, great line.
Brian

May 03, 2018

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Haydee Ahrens

Thank you all so much for your input. This was not an easy song to share and I appreciate your input. Frank, I agree that it doesn’t rhyme in the chorus. Generally, I prefer most lyrics to rhyme at some point. If something comes to me that has more rhyming words, I definitely will consider it. This feels right at this time but I’m open to change. Chris, I have considered that it might be good in a film or theater as well. Brian, I really appreciate that you liked the feel of it. I will always try to release more hopeful songs. I am putting this out here only so that more can understand how people feel when they have had their rights violated in a specific way. It changes you. That’s undeniable. Like the song says, “God save me… I’m waiting for that day.” I’m waiting for the day that He heals all of those that are willing to healed within the human race. Those of us who know the true and living God know that He won’t impose Himself in any way. May He heal us all in a timely manner.

May 07, 2018

0

Reid Yamamoto

Awesome song, great lyrics and piano arrangement, and your voice sounds amazing! So expressive and I’m sure having music to sing to helped you to up your performance of this great recording!

August 27, 2018


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