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A Mother’s Special Day

Larry Palaszynski

April 16, 2018

Genre: Country

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Singer has been on the road forever and finally comes home for Mother's Day.


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Haydee Ahrens

So there was a lot of really sweet sentiments here. Surely your mom would love this song. I like the line, “Dad built a house, mom made a home”.

One thing a lot of women will take issue with is saying she had no skills. It sounds like she cooked and taught you a lot. Some women will take issue with it but I don’t because it seems like you mean she has skills but the world doesn’t acknowledge them. Also, the melody needs a little more oomph somewhere. It’s comforting which is suitable because mothers are comforting and nurturing but it needs a bit more passion in the sound in places. Overall, I appreciated it very much as a mother.

April 21, 2018

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Larry Palaszynski

Thanks for the feedback.  It was interesting that you pointed out that you thought the line “she had no skills” referred to the mother.  At that point in the song I was still referring to a baby.  Maybe I should have inserted the word “I” to make it clearer.  That’s why feedback is important, other’s see things we don’t.  I listend to your three songs and will comment.  Please listen to my (Larry Psl) other 2 songs posted, one is about a relationship that worked, the other is a high energy “motivational” rock song.

Thanks for taking the time to listen and comment.

April 21, 2018

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Haydee Ahrens

Okay, so I listened to it again. Last time I listened to it twice, and I don’t know why I thought you were referring to your mom as having “no skills”. I guess perhaps because it is usually assumed that babies don’t have any skills except for being completely adorable

April 23, 2018

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Haydee Ahrens

I now get it but I’m a little slow, I won’t lie.

April 23, 2018

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Haydee Ahrens

I still agree with previous thoughts, it is a truly lovely song but needs a little lyrical refinement and some more variation in melody or intensity somewhere, though it is overall more sweet and soothing which is appropriate given that it is about mothers. It just depends on if this is is a personal song or song you wish to put out there commercially. If it’s personal, it’s just right, but if it’s also for commercial purposes, maybe shorten and tighten it up a bit. It is time to celebrate marriages, parenting, and children in music. It’s time to build up the family unit which is being relentlessly attacked and disparaged. You have the blessed advantage of having parents that really loved you and directed you so you have something to contribute to this discussion.

April 23, 2018

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Haydee Ahrens

Sorry for the many messages. I put in emojis and it cut my feedback up.

April 23, 2018

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Haydee Ahrens

So there was a lot of really sweet sentiments here. Surely your mom would love this song. I like the line, “Dad built a house, mom made a home”.

One thing a lot of women will take issue with is saying she had no skills. It sounds like she cooked and taught you a lot. Some women will take issue with it but I don’t because it seems like you mean she has skills but the world doesn’t acknowledge them. Also, the melody needs a little more oomph somewhere. It’s comforting which is suitable because mothers are comforting and nurturing but it needs a bit more passion in the sound in places. Overall, I appreciated it very much as a mother.

April 21, 2018

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Larry Palaszynski

Thanks for the feedback.  It was interesting that you pointed out that you thought the line “she had no skills” referred to the mother.  At that point in the song I was still referring to a baby.  Maybe I should have inserted the word “I” to make it clearer.  That’s why feedback is important, other’s see things we don’t.  I listend to your three songs and will comment.  Please listen to my (Larry Psl) other 2 songs posted, one is about a relationship that worked, the other is a high energy “motivational” rock song.

Thanks for taking the time to listen and comment.

April 21, 2018

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Haydee Ahrens

Okay, so I listened to it again. Last time I listened to it twice, and I don’t know why I thought you were referring to your mom as having “no skills”. I guess perhaps because it is usually assumed that babies don’t have any skills except for being completely adorable

April 23, 2018

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Haydee Ahrens

I now get it but I’m a little slow, I won’t lie.

April 23, 2018

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Haydee Ahrens

I still agree with previous thoughts, it is a truly lovely song but needs a little lyrical refinement and some more variation in melody or intensity somewhere, though it is overall more sweet and soothing which is appropriate given that it is about mothers. It just depends on if this is is a personal song or song you wish to put out there commercially. If it’s personal, it’s just right, but if it’s also for commercial purposes, maybe shorten and tighten it up a bit. It is time to celebrate marriages, parenting, and children in music. It’s time to build up the family unit which is being relentlessly attacked and disparaged. You have the blessed advantage of having parents that really loved you and directed you so you have something to contribute to this discussion.

April 23, 2018

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Haydee Ahrens

Sorry for the many messages. I put in emojis and it cut my feedback up.

April 23, 2018


A Mother’s Special Day

Written by Larry Palaszynski

A MOTHER’S SPECIAL DAY By Larry Palaszynski ©2017 (716-675-8258)
Larry@ValueFindersInc.com


She was my first love, before I knew what love was,
She was my first love before I could talk,
I had no money, skills, couldn’t to do anything,
She still treated me like a king, doing everything,

Dad built our house, mom built our home,
Dad made me a man, but mom made me a gentleman
Each day is a mother’s special day, every day is a mother’s day

She gave me so much, so many things and all for free,
She was the strong one, a toughness that would never flee
Mom always words of wisdom which never seem to stop
Like an idle mind is a devil’s workshop

Dad built our house, mom built our home,
Dad made me a man, but mom made me a gentleman

She kept me busy pay’n for guitar lessons sayin,
Paying for scales is better than the cost of jails,
She knows how I feel, it’s time for me to show it,
Always missed Mother’s Day, this time I have to visit

Dad built our house, mom built our home,
Dad made me a man, but mom made me a gentleman

Over time sent many gifts, this gift would be of time,
Opening the porch door was stepping back in time,
The smell of her just baked food in the air,
In the corner my old practice chair was still there,

Dad built our house, mom built our home,
Dad made me a man, but mom made me a gentleman

She was always giving, keeping things stable and familiar,
This was her gift for me, one I didn’t know I yearned for,
Not a day goes, by without influences from her,
Not a day goes, that I don’t miss her

Daddy built our house, mom built our home,
Dad made me a man, but mom made me a gentleman
Each day is a mother’s special day, every day is a mother’s day

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