I know there are not a lot of traditional country songs getting cuts, but I still love writing them.
I like the sound of your voice Marvin. There are still people out there who love the sound of traditional country. Write what you love and write to get cut. There’s no reason why you can’t do both!
April 25, 2018
Hey Frank and Lisa, thanks for listening and for your great comments. I appreciate ya!
April 25, 2018
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Hey Marvin. Always enjoy listening to your stuff, so well set up and thought out. Just wondering if tenses are a little confusing in a couple places. Song is in the present tense mostly,” He loves”, etc. then in BR you have he’d started” instead of maybe He’s starting to blame, also “Had started losin’” instead of maybe “has” I know you’ve thought of this,and maybe it isn’t a real big deal, so much else is just so well done.
RK
April 26, 2018
Thanks Richard for listening and commenting. You might be right about the tense conflict, but it was intentional on my part. I want the bridge to reflect that he had been questioning his decision of continuing his rodeo lifestyle for some time now. Thanks again!
April 26, 2018
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Thanks for that one Marvin and for your insight into Traditional country songs..Many of us I am sure have felt the same way, I call a lot of the country stuff being written today Country Rap which in ever sense of the word it is. I know it sells to the kids,and that is the name of the game but your songs reflect the honest and true country
May 01, 2018
Thanks Joe! I love traditional country, and wish there were more on mainstream radio.
May 01, 2018
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He’s felt the chill of city winds
And heat from desert roads
Thirty-one and fence rail thin
Still chasin’ rodeos
Each call home his mama scolds him
I never know where you are
I pray you’re OK and the right girl someday
Will cross your heart
He loves to feel that horse below
And hear the roar of a crowd
With every win he thanks his heros
To some he’s one now
An old cowboy told him once in Reno
Look at me and get smart
Don’t shut the gate on the trail love might take
To cross your heart
He’d started blamin’ the way he lives
For the lonesome achin’ in his arms
Cause lately he’s been wonderin’
Could someone ever cross his heart
She asked if he’d like one more cup
Before they closed for the night
Her sweet voice made him slowly look up
Into an angel’s eyes
Tailgate livin’ from an old Ford truck
Had started losin’ charm
You never know when things you can’t control
Will cross your heart
You never know when things you can’t control
Will cross your heart
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Thanks for sharing another nice, well crafted song. I think there is still a bigger audience for staff like this, we all grow up and get older and so many are missing more traditional country songs on the radio. Keep on!
April 15, 2018
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I like the sound of your voice Marvin. There are still people out there who love the sound of traditional country. Write what you love and write to get cut. There’s no reason why you can’t do both!
April 25, 2018
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Hey Frank and Lisa, thanks for listening and for your great comments. I appreciate ya!
April 25, 2018
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Hey Marvin. Always enjoy listening to your stuff, so well set up and thought out. Just wondering if tenses are a little confusing in a couple places. Song is in the present tense mostly,” He loves”, etc. then in BR you have he’d started” instead of maybe He’s starting to blame, also “Had started losin’” instead of maybe “has” I know you’ve thought of this,and maybe it isn’t a real big deal, so much else is just so well done.
RK
April 26, 2018
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Thanks Richard for listening and commenting. You might be right about the tense conflict, but it was intentional on my part. I want the bridge to reflect that he had been questioning his decision of continuing his rodeo lifestyle for some time now. Thanks again!
April 26, 2018
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Thanks for that one Marvin and for your insight into Traditional country songs..Many of us I am sure have felt the same way, I call a lot of the country stuff being written today Country Rap which in ever sense of the word it is. I know it sells to the kids,and that is the name of the game but your songs reflect the honest and true country
May 01, 2018
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Thanks Joe! I love traditional country, and wish there were more on mainstream radio.
May 01, 2018
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Thanks for sharing another nice, well crafted song. I think there is still a bigger audience for staff like this, we all grow up and get older and so many are missing more traditional country songs on the radio. Keep on!
April 15, 2018