This is a story of how one guy choses to get his frustrations/anger out. It is present tense. Uptempo. Very manly but fun hopefully. I believe it would sound best with a mix of Smokey and the Bandit and Dukes of Hazard themes and Cody Johnson and Easton Corbin and Dustin Lynch sounds. It needs a rockin', punchy tune. I am very happy to collaborate to get this song moving along. One of my favourite I have penned.
Please excuse the very rough singing of the lyrics - it's just to get an idea of how the lyrics could flow.
Does it sound like what a man might do? Does it sound authentic? Does the lyric make sense? Do you like it? Let me know what you think. Cheers
If this is your first time creating a melody, good job. Sounds like you are a good lyricist and are well on your way to creating good melodies too.
April 11, 2018
Thanks Haydee. I really appreciate the kind comments.
I have absolutely no experience creating melodies and I cannot read or play music. This was just the way it all flowed in my head and yes needs a great deal of help from someone who can create musical melodies.
I do kind of get stuck in the whole formula thing but if someone is willing to collaborate I am quite happy to move things around to create a great rockin song. I see this as definitely country rock - perhaps a Bon Jovi vibe as well as what I put in the summary of the song.
Thank you very much again. I’m so excited to see if this can become an awesome joint venture.
April 11, 2018
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I’m like you in a lot of ways, I don’t play instruments. This was a great attempt at a melody, a solid start. It’s kind of a rowdy song, fun in It’s own way. Yes, I’m definitely getting a Bon Jovi vibe from it now that you mention it .
April 11, 2018
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Anything with a photo of the General Lee on it has to be listened to (grew up watching Bo, Luke and Daisy, even on British TV!)
Just my opinion (as ever) so do please feel free to ignore - I’d actually cut out a lot lines. I think it becomes more dynamic that way, and doesn’t seem to lose the story or emotion at all - Verse 3 is already shortened for isntance, and I think that gives it much more punch!
See what you think, this is just quick so may not be what you are looking for, but I think less is more, to keep everything moving right along at high speed - just like the General Lee!
She started on me soon as I walked in the door
Rantin and ravin and layin down the law
I turned back round, grabbed my keys and headed for the barn
Called back to her – Darlin I don’t give a darn!
It’s gonna get ugly, I’m gonna start to shout
Gotta get out of this house - gotta go and Duke it out
Slid in through the window of my ’69 Dodge
Took it down past the creek and old huntin’ lodge
Found the lake by Hazard where we used to catch trout
Grip the wheel hang on tight – It’s time I Duke it out
Dropped it down into second, slammed the pedal to the floor
Woah mumma!, nothing heals like listenin’ to that roar
Got my own General Lee slidin’ through the bends
I know it ain’t the done thing but that’s how my mind mends
I feel so much better – I’ve had time to Duke it out
April 12, 2018
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DUKE IT OUT
Written by Sonya Dauth
20th April, 2017
V1 She started on me soon as I walked in the door
Rantin and ravin and layin down the law
I’m tryin so hard not to get caught in this fight
Sat down with my beer but God damn that still ain’t right
Stood up, grabbed my keys and headed for the barn
Called back to her – Darlin I don’t give a darn!
It’s gonna get ugly, I’m gonna start to shout
Gotta get out of this house - gotta go and Duke it out
V2 Slid in through the window of my ’69 Dodge
Took it down past the creek and old huntin’ lodge
To a little backwoods road nobody else knows
God I love it out here and fightin’ really blows
Found the lake by Hazard where we used to catch trout
Grip the wheel hang on tight – It’s time I Duke it out
CH Dropped it down into second, slammed pedal to the floor
Woah mumma!, feel the pow’r and listen to the roar
Turned tight into the right, pulled hard on the brake
Driftin’ round each corner and floorin’ it down the straight
Got my own General Lee slidin’ through the bends
I know it ain’t the done thing but that’s how my mind mends
Dust, dirt and stones flyin up there ain’t no doubt
I feel so much better – I’ve had time to Duke it out
V3 Drove back to the house and left it by the tree
Stepped in through the door and she pushed on right past me
Heard the engine start to rev and the tyres burnin out
I’m guessin’ it’s her turn to go and Duke it out
CH Dropped it down into second, slammed pedal to the floor
Woah mumma!, feel the pow’r and listen to the roar
Turned tight into the right, pulled hard on the brake
Driftin’ round each corner and floorin’ it down the straight
She’s got my General Lee slidin’ through the bends
She know it ain’t the done thing but that’s how her mind mends
Dust dirt and stones flyin’ up there ain’t no doubt
She’ll feel so much better she’s had time to Duke it out
BR Sometimes all you need is some time to clear your head
No fightin’ and shoutin’, just gasoline instead
CH Dropped her down in to second put the pedal to the floor
Woah mumma, feel the pow’r and listen to the roar
Turned tight to the right, pulled hard on the brake
Driftin’ round each corner and floorin’ it down the straight
We got our own General Lee slidin’ through the bends
We know it ain’t the done thing but that’s how our minds mend
Dust dirt and stones flyin’ up there ain’t no doubt
We feel so much better we’ve had time…….
We feel so much better we’ve had time to Duke it out
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Your singing is just fine, you are able to sing on key. The lyrics sound like they have as good flow. The thing is I know most songs have a verse, chorus, verse, chorus, bridge, chorus, etc. Some have a pre-chorus, others have a climb. That sounds rather formulaic at times and I don’t always write in an exact way, sometimes what comes out is raw. The verse has a solid but rather repetitive sound. It’s only when you get to “It’s time to duke it out” that the song gets a bit of a break from the repetitive melody. It probably needs to be edited a little and needs some work on the melody so that different parts of the song sound more distinctive. Again, the melody I hear does sound like it has a good starting point, but there has to be more points where it changes up a bit to really catch the ear. Now I’ve heard some have choruses that are only one line. That may be the case here. Also, this song sounds like rock or country, not sure, but I don’t think it’s pop. Hope that helps, thanks for sharing.
April 11, 2018
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If this is your first time creating a melody, good job. Sounds like you are a good lyricist and are well on your way to creating good melodies too.
April 11, 2018
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Thanks Haydee. I really appreciate the kind comments.
I have absolutely no experience creating melodies and I cannot read or play music. This was just the way it all flowed in my head and yes needs a great deal of help from someone who can create musical melodies.
I do kind of get stuck in the whole formula thing but if someone is willing to collaborate I am quite happy to move things around to create a great rockin song. I see this as definitely country rock - perhaps a Bon Jovi vibe as well as what I put in the summary of the song.
Thank you very much again. I’m so excited to see if this can become an awesome joint venture.
April 11, 2018
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I’m like you in a lot of ways, I don’t play instruments. This was a great attempt at a melody, a solid start. It’s kind of a rowdy song, fun in It’s own way. Yes, I’m definitely getting a Bon Jovi vibe from it now that you mention it .
April 11, 2018
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Anything with a photo of the General Lee on it has to be listened to (grew up watching Bo, Luke and Daisy, even on British TV!)
Just my opinion (as ever) so do please feel free to ignore - I’d actually cut out a lot lines. I think it becomes more dynamic that way, and doesn’t seem to lose the story or emotion at all - Verse 3 is already shortened for isntance, and I think that gives it much more punch!
See what you think, this is just quick so may not be what you are looking for, but I think less is more, to keep everything moving right along at high speed - just like the General Lee!
She started on me soon as I walked in the door
Rantin and ravin and layin down the law
I turned back round, grabbed my keys and headed for the barn
Called back to her – Darlin I don’t give a darn!
It’s gonna get ugly, I’m gonna start to shout
Gotta get out of this house - gotta go and Duke it out
Slid in through the window of my ’69 Dodge
Took it down past the creek and old huntin’ lodge
Found the lake by Hazard where we used to catch trout
Grip the wheel hang on tight – It’s time I Duke it out
Dropped it down into second, slammed the pedal to the floor
Woah mumma!, nothing heals like listenin’ to that roar
Got my own General Lee slidin’ through the bends
I know it ain’t the done thing but that’s how my mind mends
I feel so much better – I’ve had time to Duke it out
April 12, 2018
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Haydee Ahrens
Your singing is just fine, you are able to sing on key. The lyrics sound like they have as good flow. The thing is I know most songs have a verse, chorus, verse, chorus, bridge, chorus, etc. Some have a pre-chorus, others have a climb. That sounds rather formulaic at times and I don’t always write in an exact way, sometimes what comes out is raw. The verse has a solid but rather repetitive sound. It’s only when you get to “It’s time to duke it out” that the song gets a bit of a break from the repetitive melody. It probably needs to be edited a little and needs some work on the melody so that different parts of the song sound more distinctive. Again, the melody I hear does sound like it has a good starting point, but there has to be more points where it changes up a bit to really catch the ear. Now I’ve heard some have choruses that are only one line. That may be the case here. Also, this song sounds like rock or country, not sure, but I don’t think it’s pop. Hope that helps, thanks for sharing.
April 11, 2018