Haydee Ahrens

All in all, I like the lyrics. The ending of the verse has a chord that for some reason seems incongruous a bit. Also, is it a two or three chord switch on the verses? It sounds like it needs maybe another chord to give it a little more variability. I like the melody in the choruses with that harmony thrown in. This was hard to critique because it’s a song to your sweetheart. I think all in all, it’s lovely, just needs a little more work. Hope that helps.

Sandra Lynn

This is a very special song that you both will all cherish forever. Such a beautiful thing to be able to express such emotion to your wife, not everyone is so lucky to have someone A) write a song about them B) have someone to sing them that song! With songs like this, I like to hear a tad bit more of originality or specifics to your situation, something that makes it interesting and unique, in addition to the generalities that make the song apply to everyone. “everywhere I want to be is within you” and such are sweet phrases that yes apply to everyone but I think theres a line to be aware of in songs where the listener wants to connect on a deeper level either by appreciating what the writer is saying or recognizing its a well told story if it doesn’t apply to them personally. For example what is it about her that you like? Can you make a verse about a special time you shared? Just something like that would bring the song to a new level! Very pretty though!

Frank Renfordt

Hi Ken, thank you for sharing your song with us. Nice guitar playing and sound. The structure of the song is unusual, what makes it a bit difficult for the listener to follow. It takes some time till you get to the chorus , I would expect a chorus after the first verse. The musical break after the chorus comes somehow out of nowhere and needs getting used to. Your lyric is very poetic and some lines sound a bit awkward to me. With a more conversational language it would be easier for the listener to relate to your song. That is my personal view on your song, but you have written it for your wife and it’s much more important she likes it. Overall nice work -  keep on writing.

Dori Weaver

HI Ken, I can hear the emotion in the vocals as I hear the beautifully written lyrics.  You did a wonderful job with this and your wife had to cry when she heard that this was written for her.  .....the guitar work is gorgeous….I miss NY, NY…hope all is well there:)