Every year my best friends from college meet up for a reunion at a football game in Tallahassee. We were thick as thieves in college and it all comes right back when we get together. We all look forward to that one weekend a year. Are lives pretty much diverge the other 362 days a year.
Hi! I like the drifting feel of the song and the theme, and the voice! The only things I can think of for making suggestions is on arrangement and production stuff - I’d reduce the number of times the “guitar break” comes in, or make it a bit different each time (or both!). I’d also do something to give the chorus even more of a shift from the verse - a change to the drums might be all it takes there.
March 22, 2018
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Hi, Ani! It’s less about us meeting up and more about how different we’ve become. The first two verses are about people who (stereotypically at that age) have to get out to a big city (track for your race car mind that never sleeps) and chase money (...tell me your king now). The chorus about staying where they loved me was about not doing any of those things and choosing to “stay” true to oneself as a goal. Thank you for the feedback!
March 22, 2018
Hi, Tommy! It definitely has some production issues. Good ear. I used an Ableton looping session to build it, so rather than record different riffs, I went with that one. A bit lazy, but I was trying to get the music just good enough to finish the lyrics. I completely mellowed out the chorus and didn’t build it up enough and make it a highlight. Thank you for the feedback!
March 22, 2018
Well maybe the other option is build the verse, and keep the chorus mellow just as it is : ) I do like how the chorus sounds right now, the more I think about it. I think so long as there is slightly more of a shift or change, then bingo, the song will jump up another notch!
PS that race car mind line is awesome!
March 23, 2018
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I heard you found a home
away from this troubled sea
A track for your race car mind
that never sleeps
I stayed here in the place where you loved me
Can we meet again some day in Tallahassee?
Its been so long
since those nights running free
And they tell me you're king now,
but you're still brother to me
I stayed here in the place where you loved me
Can we meet again some day in Tallahassee?
Day after day in my mind I see
Ten of us in a room
and now it's just me
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I like the sound. It is good. I don’t quite get how it is about best friends meeting up. The chorus sounds more like a love story.
March 22, 2018
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Hi! I like the drifting feel of the song and the theme, and the voice! The only things I can think of for making suggestions is on arrangement and production stuff - I’d reduce the number of times the “guitar break” comes in, or make it a bit different each time (or both!). I’d also do something to give the chorus even more of a shift from the verse - a change to the drums might be all it takes there.
March 22, 2018
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Hi, Ani! It’s less about us meeting up and more about how different we’ve become. The first two verses are about people who (stereotypically at that age) have to get out to a big city (track for your race car mind that never sleeps) and chase money (...tell me your king now). The chorus about staying where they loved me was about not doing any of those things and choosing to “stay” true to oneself as a goal. Thank you for the feedback!
March 22, 2018
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Hi, Tommy! It definitely has some production issues. Good ear. I used an Ableton looping session to build it, so rather than record different riffs, I went with that one. A bit lazy, but I was trying to get the music just good enough to finish the lyrics. I completely mellowed out the chorus and didn’t build it up enough and make it a highlight. Thank you for the feedback!
March 22, 2018
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Well maybe the other option is build the verse, and keep the chorus mellow just as it is : ) I do like how the chorus sounds right now, the more I think about it. I think so long as there is slightly more of a shift or change, then bingo, the song will jump up another notch!
PS that race car mind line is awesome!
March 23, 2018
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Ani Bergman
I like the sound. It is good. I don’t quite get how it is about best friends meeting up. The chorus sounds more like a love story.
March 22, 2018
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