A song about a woman finding courage and freedom.
This demo was done at Brent Rader Studio in Nashville with Brent doing the vocals. Thanks for listening and commenting!
March 16, 2018
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Great to know that Marvin, I didn’t know Brent had a studio, but it does make perfect sense
March 17, 2018
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I like the message, finding courage and freedom - breaking out of a dead relationship can be hard, and good to hear the message that it can be done. I also like how it does that without high drama, pain, and anguish. No suggestions for change that I can think of, so this is just to say the good stuff that I enjoyed about it!
March 20, 2018
“Keep her on that train running out of track”—nice line! Also, I liked the fact that you ended the song on the 4 chord!
July 20, 2018
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I like the wordplay in the hook! I guess I’d like more imagery and more overt references to the hook in V2 and the bridge. One pet peeve I have is the phrase “bitter tears,” it’s not really descriptive unless void of context—and you immediately follow it with context of this try and try again breakup.
November 11, 2019
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Through bitter tears she prayed, “Please help me Lord”
To face the truth and listen to my heart
She tried leaving him not once, but twice before
But never found the strength to get this far
There was nothing said – there was no goodbye
Just a look to say what they had known so long
She tried goin' once, she tried goin' twice
But this time she was goin' goin' gone
Twice before she let old feelings for him
Keep her on that train running out of track
Till she couldn’t bare to wake up one more morning
To another day of living in the past
There was nothing said – there was no goodbye
Just a look to say what they had known so long
She tried goin' once, she tried goin' twice
But this time she was goin' goin' gone
Neither one of them was lookin’ for a reason
Why she should stay or where to lay the blame
They just couldn’t make hearts feel what they weren’t feelin’
They just couldn’t make love burn where there’s no flame
There was nothing said – there was no goodbye
Just a look to say what they had known so long
She tried goin' once, she tried goin' twice
But this time she was goin'
This time she was goin'
This time she was goin' goin' gone
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You are a good writer Marvin, If I might ask who does your studio work and who is the singer
March 15, 2018
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This demo was done at Brent Rader Studio in Nashville with Brent doing the vocals. Thanks for listening and commenting!
March 16, 2018
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Great to know that Marvin, I didn’t know Brent had a studio, but it does make perfect sense
March 17, 2018
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I like the message, finding courage and freedom - breaking out of a dead relationship can be hard, and good to hear the message that it can be done. I also like how it does that without high drama, pain, and anguish. No suggestions for change that I can think of, so this is just to say the good stuff that I enjoyed about it!
March 20, 2018
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“Keep her on that train running out of track”—nice line! Also, I liked the fact that you ended the song on the 4 chord!
July 20, 2018
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I like the wordplay in the hook! I guess I’d like more imagery and more overt references to the hook in V2 and the bridge. One pet peeve I have is the phrase “bitter tears,” it’s not really descriptive unless void of context—and you immediately follow it with context of this try and try again breakup.
November 11, 2019
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Joseph Guerra
You are a good writer Marvin, If I might ask who does your studio work and who is the singer
March 15, 2018