I wrote this song with Dan McGowan. Voice by Dan McGowan.
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verse 1
standing deep in the grass
listening to the sound of the wind
hiding from his past
wishing she was back home again
build
he had to find a way to carry on
distracting himself as he followed the sun
driving his tractor, ploughing the fields
Hoping his heartache would be concealed
chorus
She was a farmer’s wife
but she ran from the hills to find a better life
She was a farmer’s wife
Always running from the hills for the big city lights
verse 2
whispers and lies
were on the lips of the folks in town
but he knew the truth
about why she never came around
build 2
he told himself he was better off alone
the painful comments only sticks and stones
but the glares he got cut him to the core
nothing was the same anymore
chorus
bridge
every day on the farm he would dream
where the sun shined bright, and the fields were green
every now and then he thought he’d see her face
but she was gone forever and she’d never be replaced
verse 3
she was the city girl
he hoped that he could tame
but as it turned out
the only thing they shared was a name
build 3
she never gave her man any gratitude
only brought him down with her attitude
Looking out the window, never saying a word
She was secretly wishing for her big city world
chorus
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I think the story has a good flow, and it unfolds well (in lyrical terms), but I find myself wishing I knew just a little more about her other than that she just wasn’t cut out for country life. You have some nice lyrics, they explain the story, but I want to feel it more. You might want to think about speeding it up a tad as well.
September 24, 2018
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Michael R. J. Roth
I think the story has a good flow, and it unfolds well (in lyrical terms), but I find myself wishing I knew just a little more about her other than that she just wasn’t cut out for country life. You have some nice lyrics, they explain the story, but I want to feel it more. You might want to think about speeding it up a tad as well.
September 24, 2018
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