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I Don’t Fight Alone

James Simmons

February 06, 2018

Genre: Christian

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This song came out of a season of life when I was reminded that, even when my life looks like a war zone, I don't fight alone.

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Jayne Sachs

Nice song James.  This is not a subject or genre that I am familiar with (songs with a religious bent), but it is hooky.  I feel like the chorus has a great melody but would love to hear the melody of the first 2 lines repeat exactly again in the same way with lines 3 and 4with

February 07, 2018

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Jayne Sachs

Sorry- got kicked off internet… anyway it would be cool to hear the first two lines of the chorus repeat exactly in the same way on lines 3 and 4… with internals repeated too.  Just an idea.  Good job.

February 07, 2018

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James Simmons

Thanks Jayne, great feedback. As I think about it now, from the perspective of unstable/stable or tension and resolution I can see how making 3 and 4 match 1 and 2 would feel more stable/resolved, which is how this chorus is supposed to be functioning. Tension in the verse-resolution in the chorus. Great feedback and really helpful! Thanks so much!

February 07, 2018

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Rick McGee

Good song, James!  My suggestion is similar to Jayne’s because I really like the melody of the first three lines in your chorus.  After line three, I’d go back and repeat lines one and two, then go to the line, “no matter the foe”.  I also like that your first verse is short and gets right to the chorus.  Then I’m a bit iffy on why the second verse is twice as long…  Enjoyed listening!  God Bless!

February 08, 2018

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Lisa Caterbone

Hi James. I really liked this song. I agree in the chorus it would be nice to hear that same melody repeated as Jayne suggested. I loved the bridge… Nicely done there. My only other suggestion would be to repeat the one line,  the hook of the song, “I don’t fight alone”, a time or two towards the end of the song. It makes a definitive and beautiful statement to me and I love how it’s sung.

February 11, 2018

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James Simmons

Thanks Rick and Lisa, great feedback. this is why I am loving being a part of the Frettie community. Really helpful feedback! I will take another crack at that chorus I think!

February 11, 2018

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Jayne Sachs

Nice song James.  This is not a subject or genre that I am familiar with (songs with a religious bent), but it is hooky.  I feel like the chorus has a great melody but would love to hear the melody of the first 2 lines repeat exactly again in the same way with lines 3 and 4with

February 07, 2018

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Jayne Sachs

Sorry- got kicked off internet… anyway it would be cool to hear the first two lines of the chorus repeat exactly in the same way on lines 3 and 4… with internals repeated too.  Just an idea.  Good job.

February 07, 2018

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James Simmons

Thanks Jayne, great feedback. As I think about it now, from the perspective of unstable/stable or tension and resolution I can see how making 3 and 4 match 1 and 2 would feel more stable/resolved, which is how this chorus is supposed to be functioning. Tension in the verse-resolution in the chorus. Great feedback and really helpful! Thanks so much!

February 07, 2018

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Rick McGee

Good song, James!  My suggestion is similar to Jayne’s because I really like the melody of the first three lines in your chorus.  After line three, I’d go back and repeat lines one and two, then go to the line, “no matter the foe”.  I also like that your first verse is short and gets right to the chorus.  Then I’m a bit iffy on why the second verse is twice as long…  Enjoyed listening!  God Bless!

February 08, 2018

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Lisa Caterbone

Hi James. I really liked this song. I agree in the chorus it would be nice to hear that same melody repeated as Jayne suggested. I loved the bridge… Nicely done there. My only other suggestion would be to repeat the one line,  the hook of the song, “I don’t fight alone”, a time or two towards the end of the song. It makes a definitive and beautiful statement to me and I love how it’s sung.

February 11, 2018

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James Simmons

Thanks Rick and Lisa, great feedback. this is why I am loving being a part of the Frettie community. Really helpful feedback! I will take another crack at that chorus I think!

February 11, 2018


I Don’t Fight Alone

Written by James Simmons

Vs1
Some days my heart is like a fortress
Tall walls to keep the danger back
Other days I’m living under
A heart attack

CHORUS
But my heart is yours
You will defend it till the battle has ended
No I won’t fear the war
No matter the foe
In the battle for my heart I know
I don’t fight alone

Vs2
When I’m standing in the ruins, the night sky
Full of dust and burning ash
Lord help me to remember
The stone rolled back
Though they they laid you there in sorrow
You broke through the ranks of sin and death
Broke the back and stole the sting from heart attack

BRIDGE
You won’t let fire burn
You won’t let bomb destroy
You won’t let anybody tear apart the heart you love
I live this mystery
Because you live in me
I will overcome
And the world will see
That even when the battles rage
I don’t fight alone

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