Zydeco style fiddle song about summer love.
Any and all feedback is fine! This song was written for the folk/bluegrass style.
I agree with you! That line is a little awkward. Thanks for listening! 
February 11, 2018
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Okay, so the second line of the song wasn’t the only one that left me a little confused, there were a couple of others, but I really, really like the melody and the feel of the piece, my foot starts to tap when I listen to it and I absolutely LOVE the ‘He wasn’t what he said he’d be’ refrain—a line worthy of Gillian Welch.
And damn, your voice is sweet…
February 18, 2018
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A summer day, a moonlit night
Will make things happen otherwise not might
Will make you dance make you feel alright
Sweet Peggy knew with her eyes so bright
oh he wasn't what he said he’d be, oh he wasn't what he said he’d be.
He said take my hand, dance with me please
Just watch my feet they go 1, 2, 3
She said all I need is a bass and a fiddle
You do yours and we’ll meet in the middle
He wasn't what he said he’d be, oh he wasn't what he said he'd be
He took her round all over town
her pretty dress spun all around
people said a better pair couldn't be found
but a wandering soul wont ever touch ground
oh he wasn't what he said he’d be, oh he wasn't what he said he'd be
It wasn't long before he left
men will do what they do best
oh girl don't you cry over this mess
go on and get your pretty dress
oh he wasn't what he said he'd be, oh he wasn't what he said he'd be
Do all your dancing before you get old
so you know what to do if your heart grows cold
when you care so deep that you lose your soul
when your mind is tainted you can shine like gold
We aren't what we’d say we’d be, no we aren't what we’d say we’d be.
A summer day, a moonlit night
Will make things happen otherwise not might
Sweet Peggy knew with her eyes so bright
She had another reason to smile tonight
She wasn't what you thought she’d be, oh she wasn't what you thought she’d be
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I love your voice and your songs. I guess I don’t quite get your second lyric. Will make things happen otherwise not might. It just is a little awkward, but I am a new musician so consider the source.
This is not very good, but maybe “Will make things happen til morning gives light”
I love the story and I love the ending.
February 09, 2018
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I agree with you! That line is a little awkward. Thanks for listening!
February 11, 2018
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Okay, so the second line of the song wasn’t the only one that left me a little confused, there were a couple of others, but I really, really like the melody and the feel of the piece, my foot starts to tap when I listen to it and I absolutely LOVE the ‘He wasn’t what he said he’d be’ refrain—a line worthy of Gillian Welch.
And damn, your voice is sweet…
February 18, 2018
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Ani Bergman
I love your voice and your songs. I guess I don’t quite get your second lyric. Will make things happen otherwise not might. It just is a little awkward, but I am a new musician so consider the source.
This is not very good, but maybe “Will make things happen til morning gives light”
I love the story and I love the ending.
February 09, 2018