Heard it said that the bed is like a microcosm of the relationship.This song is about falling love in the winter. I wrote and preform this song with the band Slow Creek.
Any feedback at all!
Sandra, Love it. One point. The second verse does not seem to follow the theme of the song. Although beautiful, I was expecting more about the bed holding them vs a need for a change in seasons?
July 08, 2018
Beautiful song with a deep honesty here…wonderful write. I could picture the scenes in detail…. that’s because you “show us” when you write instead of “tell us.” Love it!
July 17, 2018
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Please dont hesistate, cancel the plans you made
THeres nothing that you need
Pack it all up, leave it for someone else
and come, come on home
Take off your boots and jacket
Throw them there on floor
Let the door close behind you
I dont care anymore
A platform up off the floor, an offering raised to the Lord
Please give us more than sleep
how many plans we've made, wounds we've healed and lies betrayed
In this upstairs master room
Chorus
Last night i felt the breeze it shook my bones and changed the leaves
am I ready for summer to be over
When that snow comes piling down, like a blanket it will wrap around
The mountains and our shoulders
Would you like a cup of coffee?
Have it any way you like
for I know when you wake up, you'll be here
This bed has held us before
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As always you have a great melody…
I’m just not sure that the verses work as there doesn’t seem to be a rhyming scheme…
Also it seems that in the chorus before the solo your lyrics changed but they weren’t reflected in the lyrics. And it seems that the last chorus is totally different again.
Just for sing ability it is usually a good practice to keep the chorus the same according to what I’ve been told, but I have done what you did before…sometimes you have to break the rules. 
I love your stuff…and would like to co-write with you if you are interested… you can email me at .(JavaScript must be enabled to view this email address)
Keep em comin’ Sandra…
January 31, 2018
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Sandra, Love it. One point. The second verse does not seem to follow the theme of the song. Although beautiful, I was expecting more about the bed holding them vs a need for a change in seasons?
July 08, 2018
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Beautiful song with a deep honesty here…wonderful write. I could picture the scenes in detail…. that’s because you “show us” when you write instead of “tell us.” Love it!
July 17, 2018
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Tony True
As always you have a great melody…
I’m just not sure that the verses work as there doesn’t seem to be a rhyming scheme…
Also it seems that in the chorus before the solo your lyrics changed but they weren’t reflected in the lyrics. And it seems that the last chorus is totally different again.
Just for sing ability it is usually a good practice to keep the chorus the same according to what I’ve been told, but I have done what you did before…sometimes you have to break the rules.
I love your stuff…and would like to co-write with you if you are interested… you can email me at .(JavaScript must be enabled to view this email address)
Keep em comin’ Sandra…
January 31, 2018