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No Maybe’s Baby

Tony True

January 31, 2018

Genre: Country

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A hook line that came from everyday conversation with my wife...This song has gone through so much change since it was first written. I see it now as an Eagles style tune and that is how I re-wrote it last time.

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I am looking for any feedback of this song...lyrics, music anything...thoughts please!

I feel it's very close if not ready but in a previous critique of it a year or so ago the pro writer made some suggestions. I have let it sit literally...and not even listened to it for almost a year and now I feel good about where it is.


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Brent Baxter

Hey, Tony!  Thanks for sharing your song.  I like that you’re writing positive/love/me-you/midtempos.  That’s commercially smart.

However, I’d watch the cliche rhymes like “you/true” in the 1st line.  You really want to grab the listener with something fresh- especially right off the bat.

I like the title, too. It’s not a knock-you-over title, but it’s simple, catchy and easy to remember.  It’s about surrounding that hook with killer, fresh content.  Also, I’d look at replacing some of you “telling” lines with “showing” lines.  For example, “hard times won’t change the way we feel” could be something like “my love won’t change from a few tears or slamming doors.” I know that doesn’t phrase right, but you get the idea.  Show me hard times, don’t just tell me about it.  Or “A stack of bills won’t change the way I feel.”  That kind of stuff.

Again, thanks for sharing your song with us.  I hope my feedback’s been helpful.  Please pay it forward by leaving a comment on someone else’s song.  Thanks!

April 27, 2018

Tony True

Awesome yes it is…

I’m glad you liked it cause I was starting to have my doubts about this song.  However with the comments you added I don’t think it needs that much to make it better and maybe even pitchable…

Another pro songwriter that I had review this tune didn’t like the story and wanted it to be all or more positive.  However I felt that wasn’t realistic and nothing is ever always positive…forever.  I had shelved it for a couple of years cause I couldn’t seem to write it in the way he had suggested…

Oddly enough he liked the chorus the way it is…with the cliche rhymes.

Thanks again Brent

April 27, 2018

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Haydee Ahrens

First of all, any time I see a song about marriage and commitment, I’m always glad. Commitment and marriage should be celebrated more than ever. It’s easy to love someone through the easy times. The melody is sweet but could use a little more spice somehow. Maybe a climb or bridge would help? Not sure. I second Mr. Baxter on more “showing” lyrics with a touch more of something substantive. Overall, it sounds like a song with a sweet and warm tone.

April 27, 2018

Reid Yamamoto

Hi Tony, I like it and it has a nice feel and definitely has an Eagles vibe, one of my favorite bands.

I think Brent and Haydee gave you better advice than I could give…

But I would consider trying to create more contrast between verses and chorus.

I love the guitar parts, especially the solo!!

November 09, 2018

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Brent Baxter

Hey, Tony!  Thanks for sharing your song.  I like that you’re writing positive/love/me-you/midtempos.  That’s commercially smart.

However, I’d watch the cliche rhymes like “you/true” in the 1st line.  You really want to grab the listener with something fresh- especially right off the bat.

I like the title, too. It’s not a knock-you-over title, but it’s simple, catchy and easy to remember.  It’s about surrounding that hook with killer, fresh content.  Also, I’d look at replacing some of you “telling” lines with “showing” lines.  For example, “hard times won’t change the way we feel” could be something like “my love won’t change from a few tears or slamming doors.” I know that doesn’t phrase right, but you get the idea.  Show me hard times, don’t just tell me about it.  Or “A stack of bills won’t change the way I feel.”  That kind of stuff.

Again, thanks for sharing your song with us.  I hope my feedback’s been helpful.  Please pay it forward by leaving a comment on someone else’s song.  Thanks!

April 27, 2018

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Tony True

Awesome yes it is…

I’m glad you liked it cause I was starting to have my doubts about this song.  However with the comments you added I don’t think it needs that much to make it better and maybe even pitchable…

Another pro songwriter that I had review this tune didn’t like the story and wanted it to be all or more positive.  However I felt that wasn’t realistic and nothing is ever always positive…forever.  I had shelved it for a couple of years cause I couldn’t seem to write it in the way he had suggested…

Oddly enough he liked the chorus the way it is…with the cliche rhymes.

Thanks again Brent

April 27, 2018

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Haydee Ahrens

First of all, any time I see a song about marriage and commitment, I’m always glad. Commitment and marriage should be celebrated more than ever. It’s easy to love someone through the easy times. The melody is sweet but could use a little more spice somehow. Maybe a climb or bridge would help? Not sure. I second Mr. Baxter on more “showing” lyrics with a touch more of something substantive. Overall, it sounds like a song with a sweet and warm tone.

April 27, 2018

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Reid Yamamoto

Hi Tony, I like it and it has a nice feel and definitely has an Eagles vibe, one of my favorite bands.

I think Brent and Haydee gave you better advice than I could give…

But I would consider trying to create more contrast between verses and chorus.

I love the guitar parts, especially the solo!!

November 09, 2018


No Maybe’s Baby

Written by Tony True

Chorus
No maybe's baby I love you, yes I do a love forever true
And I knew right from the start you were the one for me
No why's no lies we’re just meant to be

Verse 1
Destiny brought you to my life
A brand new love was born when the stars aligned
A love that can ride out any storm
Sealed on the day that our vows were sworn

Chorus
No maybe's baby I love you, yes I do a love forever true
And I knew right from the start you were the one for me
No why's no lies we’re just meant to be

Verse 2- new – Oct 25-16
Hard times won’t change the way we feel
Cause good and bad days means our life is real
Finally found our way to true love
It’s more than we imagined and all that we dreamed of

Chorus X 2 with mod.
So no maybe's baby I love you, yes I do a love forever true
And I knew right from the start you were the one for me
No why's no lies only meant to be

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