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Here on This Couch

Sandra Lyerly

January 23, 2018

Genre: Country

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This is cool! I wrote this thinking of Brent's songwriting challenge the other week on the topic of "couch". I sat down to give it a shot and something actually came out! Wrote this trying to use his 'positive upbeat' recommendations for writing commercial country songs. Its also a true story. My fiance and I work opposite shifts (I work nights at the hospital and he works construction days) so its kinda a big deal when the two of us actually have a night together where we can just relax on the couch at the same time. Was drawing from that experience in writing. Forgive the lo-fi cell phone recording of this song...its obviously in the works.

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Any thoughts on lyrics and melody? I think theres potential here but the song is a wee bit corny at the moment. Anybody want to cowrite this one with me?


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Ronnie Glenn

Hey Sandra, I really enjoyed listening to your song!

I’m not use to seeing lyrics posted with the chords very often. I like the melody and you have a nice sounding voice too.

January 23, 2018

Kay Williams/Mott

Hi Sandra, I loved what you did to the word, ‘couch’.  Sometimes life just goes by on the couch and you put in such specific visuals it was really fun to listen to.  Great melody with it.  Thanks!

January 24, 2018

Brent Baxter

Hi, Sandra!  LOVE LOVE LOVE seeing you put the Creative Kickstarters to good use!

I like that you put some tempo this, as well as a positive spin.  Some of the phrasing felt rushed, but judging by your other songs I’ve heard, I’m sure you’ll get it worked out.

I don’t think I’d go to the “world’s gone crazy” stuff in the chorus.  You haven’t really mentioned the outside world (except for his bad day) in the song, and I don’t think the chorus is the place to put it.  I could hear that in a verse or bridge where you say, “hey, let’s watch something fun instead of the news- where everyone’s gone crazy.  Guess they all chasing what we have, etc.”  What you have in the chorus just felt out of place for me.  I’d use that space to stay positive.  Either that, or you need to support the “world’s gone crazy” statement more in the verses.

Those lines in the chorus write a pretty big check, and you need to “deposit sufficient funds” in your verses to cover it.

Hope that helps!  Please take a moment to leave a comment on another writer’s song.  It doesn’t have to be super-detailed or anything.  Just a thought or two about the song.  (Also, the best way to GET feedback is to GIVE feedback.)  Thanks!

January 24, 2018

Michael R. J. Roth

Love the idea of this song, and your turnaround time on the exercise is impressive!

I really like this: “I think theres room for a couple things, maybe kids and a diamond ring?”

I do think you could work on strengthening and clarifying the idea that the world’s chasing after money, but the love you share on the couch is worth more than all they are trying to get or achieve.

January 24, 2018


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Ronnie Glenn

Hey Sandra, I really enjoyed listening to your song!

I’m not use to seeing lyrics posted with the chords very often. I like the melody and you have a nice sounding voice too.

January 23, 2018

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Kay Williams/Mott

Hi Sandra, I loved what you did to the word, ‘couch’.  Sometimes life just goes by on the couch and you put in such specific visuals it was really fun to listen to.  Great melody with it.  Thanks!

January 24, 2018

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Brent Baxter

Hi, Sandra!  LOVE LOVE LOVE seeing you put the Creative Kickstarters to good use!

I like that you put some tempo this, as well as a positive spin.  Some of the phrasing felt rushed, but judging by your other songs I’ve heard, I’m sure you’ll get it worked out.

I don’t think I’d go to the “world’s gone crazy” stuff in the chorus.  You haven’t really mentioned the outside world (except for his bad day) in the song, and I don’t think the chorus is the place to put it.  I could hear that in a verse or bridge where you say, “hey, let’s watch something fun instead of the news- where everyone’s gone crazy.  Guess they all chasing what we have, etc.”  What you have in the chorus just felt out of place for me.  I’d use that space to stay positive.  Either that, or you need to support the “world’s gone crazy” statement more in the verses.

Those lines in the chorus write a pretty big check, and you need to “deposit sufficient funds” in your verses to cover it.

Hope that helps!  Please take a moment to leave a comment on another writer’s song.  It doesn’t have to be super-detailed or anything.  Just a thought or two about the song.  (Also, the best way to GET feedback is to GIVE feedback.)  Thanks!

January 24, 2018

1

Michael R. J. Roth

Love the idea of this song, and your turnaround time on the exercise is impressive!

I really like this: “I think theres room for a couple things, maybe kids and a diamond ring?”

I do think you could work on strengthening and clarifying the idea that the world’s chasing after money, but the love you share on the couch is worth more than all they are trying to get or achieve.

January 24, 2018


Here on This Couch

Written by Sandra Lyerly

C
Tell me again about your bad day, It makes us laugh and thats okay
F
Baby I got you, and we’ll make it through
C
Its Friday night but lets watch tv, take my hand and come close to me
F
I got your fuzzy blanket, and your glass of wine


Am F
The whole world’s gone crazy
Am G
I’ve noticed more and more lately
They gotta keep on movin cause they dont have what we got
Here on this couch

Our old hound dog and tabby cat dont get along no they haven’t yet
One on each side, she’s yours and he’s mine
We got a pile of dishes from something I cooked, didn’t turn out right but I followed the book
I’ll try again, maybe this weekend

Am F Am G
If all we’ll ever be is together once or twice a week
Am F Am G
In our living room sanctuary, just maybe you and me

I think theres room for a couple things, maybe kids and a diamond ring?
Theres nowhere else I’d rather be,

than here on this couch

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