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Bite Your Lip

Shane Trepeaux

January 12, 2018

Genre: Country

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Sorry for the quality. Just a work tape level song idea here, on a one way, one take, vintage Lo-Fi music man's magic bus!-HA!

It's based on a man's knowing that his wife's/girfriend's minor mishaps simply make him a better man. Rather than being bent out of shape, he knows that when she bites her lip, all mishaps and bad things melt away for him. She's got him wrapped around her finger and jumping through hoops to make her days the very best he can.

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I'm probably going to rewrite and combined the 2nd & 3rd verse, so that the format is a little more modern. Then a bridge and some catchy hum-a-longs in it. Let me know your thoughts thanks!


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Jason Street

This is a great idea! I agree with you, it needs to be flushed out some more.

January 13, 2018

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Kevin Fox

I feel as though some of the words are rushed together. Rhyming lip with I don’t give a rip was a little weird to me .maybe look at that . Believe me I know the struggle with rhyming. Cute song though

January 15, 2018

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Shane Trepeaux

I definitely do appreciate it Jason and Kevin! Yep, maybe reworking the line right before ‘Just bite your lip’ altogether. (??) I wasn’t crazy about the word ‘rip’ either, and I’m thinking that whole line (If ya’ mess up Babe, hey I don’t give a rip) may just need to be said a different way. I’m really not liking the ‘mess up’ part of that either.

Many thanks guys! Flushing it out, rather than flushing it down the toilet may be just the ticket. - haha!

January 15, 2018

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Brent Baxter

Hey, Shane!  Thanks for sharing this with us.  I like that you’re going positive, love, me-to-you, mid tempo with this.  I know some of the phrasing is quick, but I think it might be fine once polished- I think it’s current that way.

When I think of “bite your lip” I picture the person trying not to say something.  So I’m a little thrown as to what exactly the storm is inside of her.  Frustration?  “Get-er-done” attitude?  I’m a little confused.  Or maybe I need more coffee.

Hope that helps!  Please take a moment to leave a comment on another writer’s song.  It doesn’t have to be super-detailed or anything.  Just a thought or two about the song.  (Also, the best way to GET feedback is to GIVE feedback.)  Thanks!

January 15, 2018

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Shane Trepeaux

Haha, no, no coffee needed Kemosabi! I appreciate the feedback greatly and can see how it could easily be confused.

This guy’s got a woman in his life who takes on most things as a challenge, in full-speed and head on. He’s just blown away by her in every way, even in her little mishaps. She’s just a bit hard-headed, but a very strong woman (go girl power!) He admires that determination and that inner strength. Too, having to deal with, or help pick up the pieces if you will, to her minor wrecks makes him a way better man. He realizes that and gets it. He’s just so charged by her inner determination. How could he ever be frustrated with her? Know what I mean?

Hey Brent, I KNOW you had one of those 1980’s big haired, super model posters on your wall! They sold them at the Batesville Walmart and we WORSHIPED them, remember? They’re all bitting their lips.—-hahaha! .

...Many thanks again man for the input. It’s a big help! Maybe you have ideas on how NOT TO confuse here? Thanks!

January 18, 2018

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Kay Williams/Mott

I like it.  I get the ‘bite your lip’ because I’m always hittin’ a button or saying something before my brain engages and cringe and bite my lip is so much better than the words that might come out of my mouth!!!  For other people’s sake!  Clever hook.  I had a little trouble hearing you, but I think your voice sounds really country and commercial.  I think you make the girl look personable and funny:)

January 19, 2018

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Jason Street

This is a great idea! I agree with you, it needs to be flushed out some more.

January 13, 2018

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Kevin Fox

I feel as though some of the words are rushed together. Rhyming lip with I don’t give a rip was a little weird to me .maybe look at that . Believe me I know the struggle with rhyming. Cute song though

January 15, 2018

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Shane Trepeaux

I definitely do appreciate it Jason and Kevin! Yep, maybe reworking the line right before ‘Just bite your lip’ altogether. (??) I wasn’t crazy about the word ‘rip’ either, and I’m thinking that whole line (If ya’ mess up Babe, hey I don’t give a rip) may just need to be said a different way. I’m really not liking the ‘mess up’ part of that either.

Many thanks guys! Flushing it out, rather than flushing it down the toilet may be just the ticket. - haha!

January 15, 2018

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Brent Baxter

Hey, Shane!  Thanks for sharing this with us.  I like that you’re going positive, love, me-to-you, mid tempo with this.  I know some of the phrasing is quick, but I think it might be fine once polished- I think it’s current that way.

When I think of “bite your lip” I picture the person trying not to say something.  So I’m a little thrown as to what exactly the storm is inside of her.  Frustration?  “Get-er-done” attitude?  I’m a little confused.  Or maybe I need more coffee.

Hope that helps!  Please take a moment to leave a comment on another writer’s song.  It doesn’t have to be super-detailed or anything.  Just a thought or two about the song.  (Also, the best way to GET feedback is to GIVE feedback.)  Thanks!

January 15, 2018

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Shane Trepeaux

Haha, no, no coffee needed Kemosabi! I appreciate the feedback greatly and can see how it could easily be confused.

This guy’s got a woman in his life who takes on most things as a challenge, in full-speed and head on. He’s just blown away by her in every way, even in her little mishaps. She’s just a bit hard-headed, but a very strong woman (go girl power!) He admires that determination and that inner strength. Too, having to deal with, or help pick up the pieces if you will, to her minor wrecks makes him a way better man. He realizes that and gets it. He’s just so charged by her inner determination. How could he ever be frustrated with her? Know what I mean?

Hey Brent, I KNOW you had one of those 1980’s big haired, super model posters on your wall! They sold them at the Batesville Walmart and we WORSHIPED them, remember? They’re all bitting their lips.—-hahaha! .

...Many thanks again man for the input. It’s a big help! Maybe you have ideas on how NOT TO confuse here? Thanks!

January 18, 2018

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Kay Williams/Mott

I like it.  I get the ‘bite your lip’ because I’m always hittin’ a button or saying something before my brain engages and cringe and bite my lip is so much better than the words that might come out of my mouth!!!  For other people’s sake!  Clever hook.  I had a little trouble hearing you, but I think your voice sounds really country and commercial.  I think you make the girl look personable and funny:)

January 19, 2018


V1.
Awh yeah, there ya go again
I see it coming' on, and on and on
a twisted storm of get-it-done inside your pretty head.
Yeah that's what I said Babe.
Makes me grin and laugh inside so loud.
But for you I keep it hid no doubt
'cause

(CHORUS)
Baby when you bite your lip,
I can't help myself. I gotta' hold,
that storm in you that brews your soul.
Baby when you bite your lip,
I wanna' shelter you from the weather
Your imperfections make me a better man.
-but if you can, don't forget
If ya mess up, hey I don't give a rip.
Just bite your lip

V2.
Oh no, it's not what ya planned?
So ya messed up, clouds covered up
a picture perfect now what the Hell's up.
And now you're seeing' red.
Makes me sad to see ya mad and cuss,
but when you're mad at you then I've had enough
'cause

(CHORUS)

V3.
So ya, ya' think you'll try again?
That's my take-it-on, sexy-be-strong
A love of a life I call my very best friend.
Your sun will shine on in Babe.
Even when you're down, rain's all around,
ya' gotta' way of bringing my love out
'cause

(CHORUS TO END)

Shane Trepeaux
Jonesboro, AR
870-450-1111
trepeaux@gmail.com

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