Brent Baxter

Thanks for sharing this with us, Noora!  I like the title and the simplicity of the idea.  I like the line “Tell me everything’s gonna be just fine, then I will be, too.”  That’s cool.  Simple, but cool.

However, the “I will be, too” sounds like you’re singing “boo” or “blue” like “Then I will be blue.”  Not a problem for a work tape, but you definitely want to work on that if you take it into the studio- because misunderstanding that word will totally mislead the listener.

Also, I’d like more detail in this song.  Why is the singer upset?  Did they have a fight?  Did something else happen to her?  Also, what happened yesterday that made her realize that he’s all she wants?  A little detail, please.

Hope that helps!  Please pay it forward by leaving a comment on another writer’s song.  Thanks!

Jayne Sachs

Nice melody.  I like the melody especially at the beginning of the chorus on “So tell me everything’s gonna be just fine”.  I think you could support that concept by showing us what that would “look” like to her.  For example, in the first verse she is wanting him to just hold her and tell her everything is going to be alright… it could be really cool if you could give us details on what that scene would look like, as in a mini movie.  Is she wanting him to pull her in and let her lay her head on his chest? Is he softly wiping her bangs away from her eyes, or wiping a tear off of her cheek?  Can she hear his heart beating?  These might not be the right details to start painting that mental picture, but details that help the listener “see” or “hear” or “feel” what is happening allow the listener to be a part of the mini movie. it would be really cool to get an idea of what this character is hoping to have happen from him.  I would look forward to hearing what you come up with if you decide to take another try on this!