Join The Community

Connect, showcase, get feedback and grow as a songwriter. Join the Frettie community today!

Spotlight

Marcus Reeves

November 27, 2017

Genre: Rock

More by Marcus


Likes

Our Sponsors

Learn the art, craft & business of songwriting from hit songwriter, Brent Baxter!

Likes:

Views: 720

Responses: 5




Share

Report

About This Song


Last year I performed in a local theatre production of Jesus Christ Superstar and this is a song I wrote with two of my co-performers, Alley Bilodeau and Sean Mullaney.

Feedback Requested


I'm releasing a full band version of the song as a single on Valentine's Day next year but would be interested in your thoughts in the meantime.


5 Responses


Jeremy Bean-Hodges

You know this is seriously good, right? The guitar is beautifully sparse, and my God can you lot sing.

The only thing that I think holds it back is that it feels like it needs build through a more powerful crescendo through from the entry from the solo female vocalist (“times that we’ve had”) to the “who I am” apex - not through any change in the melody, but by beefing up the accompaniment.

I’d consider going to something that builds up through:

c# (times that we’ve had) d#min fmin f# (on “who I am”), then
a#min (“the highs and the lows”) cmin c# d# (on “who I am”)

That could add a bit more feel and punch to the chorus.

Great work though.

November 28, 2017

Marcus Reeves

Thanks Jeremy - that’s lovely to hear. I’m going to add some double bass and piano to this version so will try what you’ve suggested!

The band version has a totally different feel - more of a soul feel - it’s been interesting hearing this version which almost felt more country(?) which was why I put it out ‘mid way’!

November 28, 2017

No members have liked this comment.

Bob Runk

I agree with Jeremy.  Great song.  Good job.  Looking forward to the band version, and to the “rebuild” of the version here.  It does feel like there’s an emotion waiting to come to the surface, and the crescendo that Jeremy references would be cool and satisfying .

November 30, 2017

No members have liked this comment.

Brent Baxter

Cool song!  Nice performance!

December 08, 2017

No members have liked this comment.

Marcus Reeves

Hey guys, here’s the finished version grin

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qaM_n_6Bn5w

February 13, 2018

No members have liked this comment.


You must be signed in to post feedback.


1

Jeremy Bean-Hodges

You know this is seriously good, right? The guitar is beautifully sparse, and my God can you lot sing.

The only thing that I think holds it back is that it feels like it needs build through a more powerful crescendo through from the entry from the solo female vocalist (“times that we’ve had”) to the “who I am” apex - not through any change in the melody, but by beefing up the accompaniment.

I’d consider going to something that builds up through:

c# (times that we’ve had) d#min fmin f# (on “who I am”), then
a#min (“the highs and the lows”) cmin c# d# (on “who I am”)

That could add a bit more feel and punch to the chorus.

Great work though.

November 28, 2017

0

Marcus Reeves

Thanks Jeremy - that’s lovely to hear. I’m going to add some double bass and piano to this version so will try what you’ve suggested!

The band version has a totally different feel - more of a soul feel - it’s been interesting hearing this version which almost felt more country(?) which was why I put it out ‘mid way’!

November 28, 2017

0

Bob Runk

I agree with Jeremy.  Great song.  Good job.  Looking forward to the band version, and to the “rebuild” of the version here.  It does feel like there’s an emotion waiting to come to the surface, and the crescendo that Jeremy references would be cool and satisfying .

November 30, 2017

0

Brent Baxter

Cool song!  Nice performance!

December 08, 2017

0

Marcus Reeves

Hey guys, here’s the finished version grin

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qaM_n_6Bn5w

February 13, 2018


×