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Lucky Paradise

Larry Palaszynski

November 15, 2017

Genre: Country

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Picked out the right woman and the relationship worked out!


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Brent Baxter

Hey, Larry!  Thanks for sharing your song with us.  It has a classic, classy old-school country vibe to it.  I like that it’s a positive love song.  Have you thought about singing the song TO her?  It’s more impactful that way.

If your goal is to get this thing cut, having the singer be older (“it’s been a long time since friends threw that rice” and other lines) limits how many singers can sing it.  It doesn’t make the song any better or worse on its own.  It just chances your chances of getting the song recorded by a major artist.

I like the hook “we’re a pair of dice who rolled paradise.”  I’d like to see more of your lyric address the dice metaphor.  Maybe talking about how you took a gamble on your love, etc. Not too much where it become a novelty thing, but enough that it supports the hook and lets it shine even more.

Hope that helps!  Please pay it forward by leaving a comment on another writer’s song.  Thanks!

November 23, 2017

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Brent Baxter

Hey, Larry!  Thanks for sharing your song with us.  It has a classic, classy old-school country vibe to it.  I like that it’s a positive love song.  Have you thought about singing the song TO her?  It’s more impactful that way.

If your goal is to get this thing cut, having the singer be older (“it’s been a long time since friends threw that rice” and other lines) limits how many singers can sing it.  It doesn’t make the song any better or worse on its own.  It just chances your chances of getting the song recorded by a major artist.

I like the hook “we’re a pair of dice who rolled paradise.”  I’d like to see more of your lyric address the dice metaphor.  Maybe talking about how you took a gamble on your love, etc. Not too much where it become a novelty thing, but enough that it supports the hook and lets it shine even more.

Hope that helps!  Please pay it forward by leaving a comment on another writer’s song.  Thanks!

November 23, 2017


It’s been a long time, since friends threw that rice
We’re still lovin those, soft romantic nights

Didn’t want to risk lose’n everything,
Chose not chase that firm’s brass ring,
Was a wise move, cause that business is gone,
Was a wise move, cause our love is still strong,

We’re a pair of dice, who rolled paradise
We’re a pair of dice, who rolled paradise

Married the woman not a place or context,
Married the woman who’s natural and complex,
Didn’t marry her purse’s content,
But I know now, that she’s more than perfect,

We’re a pair of dice, who rolled paradise
We’re a pair of dice, who rolled paradise

Never thought ’bout the vows we said,
Enjoyed the richer, endured the poor,
Enjoyed the good health, survived sickness,
Loved our good times, endured our bad

We’re a pair of dice, who rolled paradise
We’re a pair of dice, who rolled paradise

Vows ended with “love ‘til death do us part”
But, our love is forever in our hearts,
Our love’s forever, forever in our hearts
Our love’s forever, forever in our hearts

We’re a pair of dice, who rolled paradise
We’re a pair of dice, who rolled paradise
Pa – ra – dise, rolled the dice

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