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She came down from heaven

Angie Dennison

November 14, 2017

Genre: Pop

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I'm not 100% sure of what category this song falls under so I chose "pop". The lyrics and melody were written about a time when I was a young single mother living in Tennessee feeling very judged for not being married. I had the melody and lyrics and my friend started playing a riff and it fell together as if they were written for each other. It was recorded about 15 years ago and I've added it so my page isn't empty:) My writing is usually much more modern country type music. Any feedback is welcome. The vocal (me) is pretty weak and overpowered but at least you have something to listen to (wink). Currently I'm seeking co-writers for contemporary county songs. I live in Port St Lucie FL and am having some difficulty finding anyone with the same interests. I sing and usually write with a melody in my head (along with all of the other instruments playing in my head). The problem is that I don't play any instrument well enough to put a track down.....hey, we're all a work in progress.


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Brent Baxter

Hey, Angie!  Thanks for sharing your song with us (I’m glad your page is no longer empty)!  I think this is more of a country song than anything else.  I like that you’re writing with some tempo.  I like the rainbow image.

Honestly, not having the lyrics in front of me, it’s hard to really dig into them much further.  I’m not crazy about the last line of the chorus, “she’s everything I need besides myself.”  I get that all you need is yourself (self-reliance) and her, but it feels kinda odd for that thought to be at the end of the chorus.  Since the main thought is how blessed you are by your daughter, it’s an odd left turn to turn the spotlight back to yourself at the end of the chorus.  I’d find a way to land that chorus back on the main point, or theme, and not on anything else.  I hope that helps!

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November 16, 2017

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Angie Dennison

Thanks Brent for the feedback! I completely agree with the last line of the chorus. Remembering back to when I wrote this I think it was coming from a place of single motherhood and knowing if I didn’t take care of myself I wouldn’t be able to take care of her. What a crazy balance to keep!

I’ll likely not pursue this as a re-write but my kiddo loves that it was written about her (she is 20 now). I plan to remove it and hopefully will have some new stuff on here soon. Thanks again. I’ll definitely pay it forward!

November 16, 2017

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Jayne Sachs

Hey Angie, I agree with Brent about that last line.  It threw me a bit.  If you’re writing for country, I was expecting to hear the title at the end of the CH.  I am used to that kind of crafting.  Sounds as if you could write an entire new song on the concept of “only needing myself”, etc..
Good job!

November 21, 2017

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Brent Baxter

Hey, Angie!  Thanks for sharing your song with us (I’m glad your page is no longer empty)!  I think this is more of a country song than anything else.  I like that you’re writing with some tempo.  I like the rainbow image.

Honestly, not having the lyrics in front of me, it’s hard to really dig into them much further.  I’m not crazy about the last line of the chorus, “she’s everything I need besides myself.”  I get that all you need is yourself (self-reliance) and her, but it feels kinda odd for that thought to be at the end of the chorus.  Since the main thought is how blessed you are by your daughter, it’s an odd left turn to turn the spotlight back to yourself at the end of the chorus.  I’d find a way to land that chorus back on the main point, or theme, and not on anything else.  I hope that helps!

Please pay it forward by leaving a comment on another writer’s song.  Thanks!

November 16, 2017

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Angie Dennison

Thanks Brent for the feedback! I completely agree with the last line of the chorus. Remembering back to when I wrote this I think it was coming from a place of single motherhood and knowing if I didn’t take care of myself I wouldn’t be able to take care of her. What a crazy balance to keep!

I’ll likely not pursue this as a re-write but my kiddo loves that it was written about her (she is 20 now). I plan to remove it and hopefully will have some new stuff on here soon. Thanks again. I’ll definitely pay it forward!

November 16, 2017

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Jayne Sachs

Hey Angie, I agree with Brent about that last line.  It threw me a bit.  If you’re writing for country, I was expecting to hear the title at the end of the CH.  I am used to that kind of crafting.  Sounds as if you could write an entire new song on the concept of “only needing myself”, etc..
Good job!

November 21, 2017


She came down from heaven

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